by Darkniciad
I love that you're putting more detail into your work, having read Danica, SOTM, and the off shoots of that world. I vastly enjoyed this chapter.
I admire the deft way in which you painted the scenery. Too much scenery bugs the crap out of me. For that reason, I tend to stay away from it. But in your story, I read the scenery paying close attention looking for the means of help she was seeking. I didn't even realize I was doing this until I saw your comment at the end. Very sneaky oh silly one!
This is really very good!
This is good work. Although I'm not familiar with your previous work, this story looks very interesting. Carry on!
-- KK in Texas
good descriptive writing and character development. Liking this very much.