All Comments on 'To Please Him Ch. 01'

a lower key. But the story somehow sounds...., childish?

I loved this (hopefully more to come)

Made me wet and I am really looking forward to more - please.

Brit Girl,

So far, very well-written. But there is almost no plot in Ch. 01. The kids are away and they have two weeks to play. They've gotten "the lay of the land" as it were, but really, nothing has happened so far. It seems as if she is the one turned on, she is the one who selected the locale, and she is exhibiting the most daring. I think she perceives this for what it is, a chance for zipless fucks with no strings. The question is, will hubby handle this well or will he end up with conflicted emotions? Is he going to fuck other women too? If so, I think group sex or erotic couplings would be a better category than loving wives for this story. The clean bill of health medallion is pretty phony, though; we know a person can have an STD with no visible signs (Herpes, HIV, secondary syphilis) so just a physical examination is no guarantee. Blood tests take time and are not fool-proof either. Of course, in stories, no one gets STD's so maybe it is irrelevant. Please keep writing.

Just silly, not a story that appeals at all.