All Comments on 'Tommy and Sarah'

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 2 years ago

Very long, single sentence paragraphs. Maybe you are going for effect. But it reads like the narrator needs to take a breath.

TGC140TGC140almost 2 years ago

Break your paragraphs into sentences.

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