All Comments on 'Toy's Tale'

Loved it

Anger, over reaction and then shallow remorse. Does the pattern sound familiar to anyone? Your writing is good, the relationship not so much.

LEAVE HIM! Ok so what was she punished for? Agree with other anonymous mostly. Dear author some of us are not good at writing you are some of us. Please don't write anymore.

Dear writer, you did a great job, I felt as though I was the master, even though I am a woman... if I had been master, I would have treated you much sweeter... and been to jealous to share you... thank you for your work. -L-

very complex & intense writing

very vivid / evocative / emotional

enthralling . 5 stars

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lmao at some of the comments ,

i guess thats the price you pay

for such good word craft .

so enraptured by the writing

it has become real for them.

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xxxhugsxxx

No, it is not so good it has become real. Quite the opposite, it is ugly and surreal and lacking any light or caring. It is text book abuser behavior attempting to hide behind bdsm. The sparkly ring is a red herring, meaningless.

I assume this is fiction. As fiction it's not bad; the writing could be a little more personal and less like a travelogue. I'm not really getting in your/your character's head as I read this, and I should be able to.

If it's non-fiction, it's not BDSM, it's just casual cruelty. I get it; casual cruelty can be hot. But it shades too far into hate and I'd be worried about someone in this relationship.