All Comments on 'Training Day'

I liked it! I want to know what happens next. Some of the dialogue was a little hard to follow, and the sex scene could be a little longer, but hey it got me turned on and that is the important part.

Got my attention in the day dream and held it...good story.

Find an editor, or read it out loud slowly a few times. Excellent us of words, thanks for not repeating yourself too often. It started off as though you were going to drag it out some, make a couple of pages out of it, and then just balls to the wall to get it done. Feel free to use your skill in descriptive creative writing to set a mood, establish a scene. Over all, I liked it a lot.

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