All Comments on 'Training Day'

Find an editor, or read it out loud slowly a few times. Excellent us of words, thanks for not repeating yourself too often. It started off as though you were going to drag it out some, make a couple of pages out of it, and then just balls to the wall to get it done. Feel free to use your skill in descriptive creative writing to set a mood, establish a scene. Over all, I liked it a lot.

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Got my attention in the day dream and held it...good story.

I liked it! I want to know what happens next. Some of the dialogue was a little hard to follow, and the sex scene could be a little longer, but hey it got me turned on and that is the important part.