by brendachaplin2000
Well written but if you’re not prepared to finish it, why start? Have confidence to prepare and write a complete story.
I loved the start of this story: vivid descriptions and interesting characters. Please continue!
Only just started reading it and I gotta comment already. Looks good, but there are no 2 year vets (they're still sprogs), the youngest you can join the cops is 18 and a half (you used to be able to join the cadets at 17 I think but I dont know if the cadets are even a thing anymore) but the most egregious thing I read is this. No cop who works the street EVER says he/she hopes for a "quiet" shift out loud. It's the kiss of death and any cop near them would groan and smack them upside the head for the horrible shit that was gonna rain down upon them because some idiot tempted fate. Looking forward to reading the rest though.
Great sart , although you have left a little early with your ending. Expect to see more action in that you have described a woman with some exceptional martial arts skills. It is your story and somewhere in this is going to be a good ending and perhaps the bad guys will meet a similar fate to Steve.
Please continue. Being a sick fuck, I am hoping that it just keeps getting worse for our protagonist and there is no escape or white knight.
Well, yes, please continue. What is left of the auction? What happens after Sarah is sold before she is lead away to meet her new master/mistress? What adventures (lol) will Sarah have to endure before she finally gets her freedom? I always wish for a good ending when the victim is innocent whereas if the victim is a real bitch to others, I am ok with having a lot of things happen to the victim. Either she learns how to treat others well or she ends up a broken slave. Steve certainly did not deserve to die in such a horrible way so I hope some payback will come to Sarah to inflict on the slavers. Or maybe there is a good ending with Sarah being treated well and she really does learn to love her master/mistress?
I've read enough stories where the main characters give up or it's just one ghastly act after another. Have her take her own virginity or fuck or fight her way out of it, but please give her some real fight.
Great start! Looking forward to the next part. I hope the buyers ask some questions about her and she sells herself the way they would want her to.
I really like this story, and I would very much want you to continue the story.