All Comments on 'Ch. 01 Twins Discover Each Other'

Not bad but you need a proofreader. E.g. waist not waste.

Great story. Waiting for moms storu.

loved it continue very hot story and it was awesome.

This story keeps your attention, but 4 was as high as I could realistically rate it. I found no mention of pubic hair on the sister therefore this reader had no choice but think this was just another shaved pussy story. Shaved, meaning razor burn and chaffed skin, stubble, ingrown hairs, and the pus oozing pimples that are commonly associated with shaved pussy. Additionally, I would add, if it's a re-shaved pussy, the (stubble gets scraped off and the pimple heads RE-CLIPPED), it is just a mess of blood and pus oozing pimples and the residual unshavable stubble (in the pimple heads) in the genital area. This story could otherwise be continued with additional chapters. I would also add appropriate amounts of pubic hair (closely trimmed, neatly trimmed, full bush sexy, extremely thick, and/or monster-hairy) to the character descriptions in those chapters to prevent lower peer ratings.

Can’t wait to hear moms story!!!

Love the story, more please. tell Moms story and how Kai gets to keep loving both of the girls.

Good lead in story.

BS story, no credibility and for a college senior, your spelling is crap too.

We loved reading this story , gave a picture of how their love started , the sex side of your story was horny too . 5 ***** from us

Fantastic story... good job. I think an editor would be a big help for you. It is hard to get everything correct alone. Keep up the good work.

Hottttt! Wish my first time was as romantic and hot as theirs was!

Well written story. It was interesting reading how brother and sister discovered sex with each other.