All Comments on 'Two Wrongs'

Good one.

What goes around comes around. Planning can always back fire.

Skippy the dumb

Waste of time! Did you really think this was clever?

Stan/Trey got bit in the butt!

5

Dumb

Neat !

It’s only 750 words but you still got names wrong, was Trey Stans middle name?

Who is Trey?

How was he able to remove the app from her phone if he was an airplane ride's distance away?

Play stupid games, win stupid prizes.

Working with a 750-word limit is a real challenge. This story was only okay…twists were okay, but for some reason it didn’t hang together.

The best laid plans . . . .

Perfection in pose

Again predictable, but this one had a few more twists at least. 4*

"Besides, Stan told me that if I divorced him, he would kill me. I believe him." - I thought he was Trey?

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"(What lover? I faked)" - Why is that a parenthetical? Just make it a following sentence.

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Meh ending.

Twist ending. Good to cover all your bases

I liked this story a lot. Despite the Trey/Stan mixup, 5 stars from me.

Moral of the story for wives trying to kill their husbands- PATIENCE.

My gawd he's stupid.... if he was going to set his wife up to kill her lover instead of him....... why didn't he handle the financial side of thing's? 😒.. sound like a half ass plan.. I didn't like this story.. both were cheaters.. neither of them were likeable.. there was zero back story, no emotions and everything moved quickly.. which would've been fine except nobody won but the slut.. she got rid of her husband (by getting herself locked up) and took all the money... the story suck'd

One last line. "It was worth it!"

When a writer worries more about the word count than the story, it's no surprise that the story suffers. Unfortunately, too many participants don't understand that the challenge in the 750 word project is not hitting exactly 750 words. That's the easy part. The challenge is to tell a good story with those 750 words.

You’re in a mood

keeping the story to meet the 750 word limit takes away from the story. Decent plot but too abbreviated to be good.

The 750 word limit placed some hard restrictions on this story. There was a lot of complicated backstory that would have been interesting.

1 star for violence

soso...

He did nothing wrong. He played a prank at worst. She still would have had the accounts cleaned out.

Murderer , thief, and cheater. That's 3 wrongs. Him pranking her is just hilarious

???????? Is there more coming? If not, that's a messed up ending.

Ha ha ha ha ha! Very good! So good, in fact, that it scores a perfect QuickMagazine 5! Funny how just the other day (or was that yesterday?),, I commented on the latest from 012Say and noted its "Skippy vibe" - and then today we get not one, but two Skippy posts! Here, no one is the good guy (or gal), all deservedly lose. Sweet.

Good one, Skip!

Who's Trey? And why the attempt to kill Stan if it's Trey she's after...

I guess it's one way to throw us off the twist :D

Cheers

ROFLMAO!

5 stars for wife and lover offing, 1 star for his inability to recover money (she couldn't have been THAT sophisticated as to avoid bank tracing, which he could get the court to do). 3 stars total

Funny and surprised me

Nice twist at the end but we the readers should get to know where that money went even though he never does.

Opps, don’t count your chickens before they hatch.

Like the other one "First divorce" i hab a good laugh. Entertaining so to me it is all good

You got me on this one. I never saw that coming. Another 5.

both characters weren't worth reading about

There were several flaws as noted by others, but it was fun go read anyway.

OK, I give up! Either Jason’s corpse is still at Sweetie’s house, rotting OR the police/D.A. were called and swallowed her story with no jail time. Then, since Sweetie was NOT contacted about his quickly arranged stay-over, how does she know details about his flight? But she and Hubby were likely taken to the same hospital, and the hospital is low on smoke to stick up her ass to determine fatality. But then, if they have all their resources in the same joint account, why not just boogie to parts unknown as soon as the bank opens, rather than shooting at Hubby in a very public place crawling with federal & local law officers. Finally, she may have been closer to Jason, but she is unlikely to just hit his shoulder.

Well, it’s a good thing that all his antagonists are dead because at todays prices he can’t even afford bullets.

A different take on your other story.

This must be some kind of Trailer-Trash comedy routine? Thanks for trying to make us laugh. It worked. And thanks for the effort.

Not my cuppa tea.

Ah, yes....Those the gods wish to destroy, they first make mad.

How many places could she go and how many places would she hide any money?

Check the cookie jar. It’s always in the cookie jar!😉

Short and not a very good read. But a good try.

He planned to set up his wife... but doesn't planed to secure his money. You know, the main reason why he set up his wife in the first place...

Doesn't make much sense, doesn't it?

Had the makings of a very interesting story, but unfortunately ended up just being an outline.