All Comments on 'Tybalt and Juliet Ch. 07'

...but SpindleTop is going on vacation, so I won't be able to post the next instalment for few weeks. I hope to be able to submit Chapter 8 for publication in mid-September.

We're about half-way through now, but there's plenty to come, including (of course) Jake and Amy's first times.

As I've written before, this is my first foray into creative writing since I was sixteen, so i'd very much welcome your feedback on the story, the characters and the plot so far. So, please let me know if there are aspects which you feel are under or overdeveloped or are given insufficient or excess emphasis. All constructive criticism to help me improve my writing, is gratefully received.

Good kids. Good writing. Believable. Can't believe I have to wait until mid-September for a follow up. :) Keep up the good work!

I'm glad to know that Jake is not dead. I am hoping that when he is treated for his injuries, he will emerge stronger and more mature. And still very much in love with Amy. Let's hope Ritchie finally gets what he deserves!

Looking forward to where you take us next.

Have a great time

Ben and Tom are Amy's half-brothers and not step-brothers since they have the same mother.

Nicely done!

Credible!