All Comments on 'Uncle Jason'

I liked your story you need to find someone to proof read them for grammar and spelling. I think you did a good job making us feel what the two people felt but you need to develop your characters a bit more. So I think you should keep writing. I know I'm a little late with this comment but here it is anyway

It seems unlikely that a guy twelve years older than her would be best friends with an elementary school girl.

best friends in elementary school, can't happen, he's 12 years older so if she's 6 when she starts, he's 18 and would have left and started work.