All Comments on 'Under Pressure'

A totally ridiculous story, but for some reason I don't really understand, I enjoyed it. You could have made it more ridiculous (and more entertaining, perhaps?) with her demanding how much he saw, heard, etc., and when Paula discovered (to her shock and horror) that he was there, getting off to some extent to her intimacies directly above him. As you wrote it though, it's closer to be being realistic, even if it is still rather far away! Who knows, though, what goes on in the world of Bostonian philosophy and metaphysics? Not me, that's for sure. 5* ~~ JB Edwards

too contrived...did you want this to be realistic or should you have made it more obviously humor and placed it in that section? This is probably why you couldn't figure out a suitable ending - whether to have them fight, make up, whatever...

This is a case of truth being stranger than fiction.

The characters are made-up, but the situation comes from real life, the details of which are so extraordinary that I left some of them out since I worried that they would strain readers' credulity and No One would buy it.

So there you are, the story's merits are up for review, but not its basis in reality.

...that kind of went nowhere.

Really enjoyed your story, particularly Paula's surprising reaction to discovering you. Doubly amusing for being true. Good thing she wasn't angry! 5*

I love this amusing short story, perfect for the voyeur category, if reluctantly. I could picture the whole scene perfectly. I'm still smiling, the ending was adorable, and in my opinion, perfectly delivered.