All Comments on 'Unexpected Torture'

What a wonderful story. Very hot but a super story to read. Please continue it.

I had a ball reading this story. Hope to see a continuation!

Awesome story! Couldn't stop reading it. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Great story, I couldn't stop reading. Please don't leave us hanging now....

Oh you have to keep writing...left me hanging on this one...hot hot story!

A well told tale! You left your readers hanging! I really don't like that at all, but will forgive you once you keep going on this really great tale.........PLEASE!

Wonderful story! As proof I submit that I read all 8 pages. Normaly if a story is over 4 pages I skip it.

You wrote one of the best stories I've ever read on this site! I could picture the seductress like I do when I read a novel. Your writing is really, really good. I hope you continue the story....or write others. I suspect your instinct on whether to continue this one will be right. GREAT JOB!

Although the story was well written, it did not end well. It left you thinking what next? You should have completed your story - in fewer than 8 chapters. Perhaps 3. All in all too long and not enough sex

usually, i don't have the patience to read long stories. but something in your story made me stay. and it was wonderful. please tell me you won't leave us readers hanging?

I have two very minor points of contention. First you , like almost everyother writer here, spelled taught instead of TAUT. My other complain is that a black tie affair calls for a tux not a jacket and tie. Otherwise I enjoyed the prolouge and cant wait for the next installment.

One of the best I've read in a while! I usually don't read long stories, but I just couldn't stop reading this one. Please continue the story; you can't leave us hanging!

I normally don't read stories this long, it took me part of last night and this morning to finish it, but it was well worth it. I do hope you'll continue the story, I'd like to see where things go from here with Holden and Vera. I think I'd also like to know more about Holden's past as well as Vera's, there's another story there alone. Great first effort. Keep 'em coming.

You have done a great line meshing several different aspects of the story yet containing it all in one! I cannot wait for your next submission of this storyline! Some may think its too lengthy, but I actually enjoy a good longer read every now and again! Some people end after one decent part and not enough bait to hook readers...you have done the complete opposite!!! Great chapters so far!!! Again, can't wait!!!

Loved it, hated it, stayed with it. Just one point for your next edit: The position that you describe as Assistant Professor is really a graduate assistant - someone who is in grad school and assists the professor, and sometimes teaches. An Assistant Professor is a full-time professor making his way up the tenure track.

Of course, there a bit less ethical pressure on a grad assistant and a student than a full-time professor, though there are still issues.

great story, got the tension just right

I LOVED IT.. whens the next 1!!

OMG... I loved it, maybe the best story I have read! pleasssse post the next one

Compelling plot, well-rounded characters, good description and dialogue. Please keep on going - will be very interested in the next part!

You clearly have a gift for language. It's a well-written story (absent the few things that have already been written about earlier), and certainly there's sex -- but the sex is just not erotic; it's too short when it happens with a lack of description.

Nice though.

Regardless if you lost your first copy. This story is the best on here. It HAS to be continued.

please please please please! I never comment or vote, but this is epic in its eroticism. PLEASE continue...

Come on! Stop Torturing us.... Write the next one already!

Perfect!!

One of the best stories i've ever read.. u certainly have a talent of writing and considering that this is your first story is alltogether more impressive..

Kudos... carry on with the story Please...

Gary

u promised in June and now its August.... such a Liar!!! :)

come on.. waiting for part 2

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Gary

garyandrewsbodyguard@yahoo.com

Its September already!!!!!! Please publish the next story!!!!

You have my attention, I hope that you feel like writing again as there is definite scope for a lot more of this story. Cheers. -- UK CYNIC

Ok please please finish this story. I am hooked. I love it

A story good for the heart, i appreciate the writer's touch with reality-the disappointment, the fear and the risks plus the dilemma were all satisfying. Thank you CarlifornianbLonde. My e-mail - udomama@yahoo.com

i want z 2nd part plzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz....

Just what I said in my title for this comment. I read and read and read the story. I couldn't stop, even after I realized that there wasn't going to be "hot sex" in the story (the Kind of sex most of us read Literotica for). You do write beautifuuly....I Had to keep on reading to find out what would be happening next. Whether or not you continue writing for this site, please keep on writing somewhere. You have a talent for narrative. You create interresting characters (just the hint of a military background...not too much but it makes the character so much more interesting.0 OH. by the way, comeon....Holden? Phoebe? Whar sort of connection am I supposed to make?

At any rate, Thank you for the story!

ILienBagby (Bushy@ureach.com if you answer e-mails).

Cannot wait for the next chapter. I know it's been a few years, hopefully ou'll be back soon with the 2nd chapter, this chapter completely ended on a cliff hanger.

Please write the next chapter.I really want to know what happens next so please,for the love of god please,continue with the next part!

Please :)<3

Must... know what happens

ahhhh your joking right that could not have been the end seriously. I want to know more why is Holdin so troubled, what is Vera sad about, will they ever have sex without getting interupted, what will happen with Matt, will Vera and Holdin stay together? I guess what Im trying to say is write more please :)

Very good. I realise it's been a while since you wrote it, but like others on here, I think you should follow up! Thanks anyway

That is just wrong, weaving a tale like this, drawing us in, only to leave us hanging, never to be heard from again. No stars this time, just a comment.

You got me.

Even the author is a tease.

Good story with interesting characters but deserves a sequel.

Why did u write this story if u did not intend to finish it? So wrong. For heaven's sake, write the sequel.

Cop out ending. Either finish it or write a sequel.

Holden, named after my favorite olden time actor William Holden ? Who often played a love torn character. Perhaps a confused "Catcher in the rye," Holden?. Your description of Madison, ( in a red bikini) my shorts got tight as well, to much information? Matt gave permission he couldn't really give. A tortured soul. I thought it did give Holden the ok to seek out a relationship he wasn't sure of. A tortured soul. Madison to hot to handle dressed very provacativly, mildly tortured. That leaves us, or at least me, with a vision of a provocatively beautiful woman. I'm another tortured soul.

I suppose my thanks are due for a fun story of young lovers. I've mostly forgotten what a young distracted life is like.

Well done. Thank You.

You cannot let it end as it is ... Please part 2

Nice story

But there was too much that was too far removed from sex.

I, for one, would have liked it if she actively teased him. Slow handjob for a long time without letting him cum, for instance.

TAUGHT is the past tense of Teach. TAUT is Tight.