All Comments on 'Unfortunate Jane Ch. 01'

I liked the story, but I thought a few parts were too rushed and details not explained. For example, was Jane on birth control? How big was his dick that seemed to take a few attempts to bottom out in her? Why did he only take her once the first time? Why no oral or anal? He could have taken her ass and then pulled out in time to cum in her pussy as getting her pregnant was the goal. What was the relationship between Tommy and Bob?

Hey cowbulls!

I highly appreciate the constructive criticism. Well my over all idea was to let the reader use their imagination to kind of fill in the blanks so to speak. That's just the type of writing I like but I completely understand what you're saying and I should have added more detail to it.

For Tommy knowing Bob, that was more of a moment to kind of catch the reader off guard.

WOW!!! 5 Stars Hot story loved it can't wait for part 2

Keep writing ! Very good Stories !

Looking forward for more .