All Comments on 'Unintended Consequences Ch. 02'

Great story line! Give us more. No doubt that video footage will be used to ensure all the boys have her, one by one and in a gangbang.

Mary left the useless prick the next morning and became a useless slut who screwed every young male at their high school and lived in a shoe, because she had so many kids she didn't know what to do.

Good grief, these guys are men. They’re in the best shape of their lives, their cocks would get hard if the wind blows and they conversation they had makes them sound like a couple of kids.

A tail is what's at the end of a dog. You meant "tale". Nice to see you know the difference between to and too, but you forgot about two, and used "too" in its place. Too many missing commas and other errors as well.

I found your story erotic, but all the errors were distracting. Please keep writing, because your stories are hot, but please proofread prior to posting them. Thanks!

Nobody is THAT stupid. I understand the horny kid (was he even of legal age?). But what motivates the slut? And why would she take the chances she does? It makes no sense. Unless Darth Vadar is coming to save her?

1 star

Ruined it for me.

It’s always possible to make a story better and such is true with yours. However, from a basic premis, this one hits the mark for the young, inexperience male.

Thank you for not making us wait too long.

She wiĺl make a good slut for young cocks.

and cheater. nuff said.

This is quite good read especialy for a boy,

Absolutely love the first and second story. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.

It would be very arousing if Mary became a slut for those three boys.

While the gay writer has written a so so story of a teenage fantasy…the number of cocks he has had to suck so that they may give him a anon. Great reviews and high scores must really have burned his knees!!!