All Comments on 'Unrequited Pt. 05'

So glad it ended this way.

Amazing story as always. Hope you continue finding happiness with your partner.

Wow I waited till the end to comment. You knocked it out of the park. I wasn’t sure where this would end up. If you went through even half of the issues you expressed here you are a very strong woman. Thank you for giving us an adventure I wouldn’t want my ex to go through which was tough enough for us both. 10 stars

Brilliant and thanks for the happy ending.

Bravo! Definitely needed the Kleenex. The whole series has been very moving, especially as I have my own Sally, though she's not physically near me anymore and we lost touch. But I still have hope my Kaleigh is out there. Thank you for the beautiful journey.

That ended perfectly glad you went with the happy ending ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

Either ending would have worked, but I am happy you went with this one. Have I told you I love your work.

Well! That must have been a monumental amount of work, and I really can't thank you enough for taking the time to write, edit, and publish this for us. In particular, I'm extremely fond of your schedule, publishing everything in what, two weeks? It's probably a good bit worse for you - a very long time of work that only a select few get to see - but it really helps us stay in the story, so thank you! It's a brilliant piece of work, and your note about some of it being from your own experience fits the overall melancholy, I think.

As for the last chapter: I was honest to god so relieved when drastic decisions were finally on the table, and I thought you handled the topic of self-harm really well. And while part of me still thinks that that is a lot of trauma to unpack in a handful of therapy sessions, I can say from personal experience that even a single session can give you a helpful new perspective on things, so maybe that tracks. Still, for me personally some of what happened after that (the decision to actually talk to Sally, her move, her talking to Kayleighs family and then Kayleigh, them having sex, reconnecting, and finally marrying) could have used some additional room to breath. I don't think it's a narrative problem per se; you could have just chosen arbitrarily longer time frames ("five years later") and I'd still feel like that. I think my main problem is just that we spent so much time with the preceding state of (mostly) perpetual self-doubt and misery that I as a reader need more time to come to terms with the changes. When she decided to invite Sally I was immediately like: "Wow, moving far to quickly", and I know that's not true within your story, but it's harder for me to appreciate Bethany's healing process if so much of it happens off-screen. But then again, what I'm essentially saying is: Write another chapter, and use like half of it on her finding a new footing in Kansas City - and even I know I'm just being greedy there, so I hope you'll forgive me :)

Anyway! I hope that didn't sound too negative, because I had a genuinely great time with your characters and their story, and I cannot wait to read whatever you do next. Two final things:

1) I think this would have been an interesting story to not have a happily ever after. Just leaving it somewhat open-ended (let's say it ends on them dating for a bit and deciding to give it another shot, and curtains) sounds like a particularly attractive ending to me, but that's just personal preference. Ending on her trying to heal apart from Sally without getting back with Kayleigh sounds even more intriguing, but also like a very difficult story to balance (for one, does that change the role the self-harm plays in the story?). It would put your readers on edge, though, and that would be a great thing for future stories :D

2) I'm really happy to hear that you found your own peace after a similar-ish situation, and wish you all the best!

Thank you for continuing to celebrate love and reminding us all of why we need to do so :)

Such a good story. I am in a way kind of i wouldn't say unhappy with the ending, but not sure how to feel. The way it ended I love, I love that it was a happily ever after ending, but I feel like it ended too soon. These types of endings always leave me wanting more. There is so much more story that could have been told, but all things must have an ending and this is a good place to end it, even if I personally wanted to hear more of their tale. I can't wait for the new story to come out whenever it is finished.

I wish this had an epilogue. Their daughter gets the golden eyes of Kayleigh's family, Patricia gets her comeuppance when she asks for Kayleigh back, Molly's final and unquestionable acceptance.

Had to wait for the end to leave a comment and here it is. Another beautiful story and I loved this ending.

I'm really falling in love with the way you write. Darn, you can play with emotions so damn well. I love how you ended this story. I really want a happy ending for Kayleigh and Bethany. They deserve it.

Sometimes you have to hit bottom before you can see clearly. I had to let go of my Sally, too, but not until after my lesbian partner died of cancer and I self destructed in several ways for some time after, including hanging on to my straight friend waaay too hard. Different story than yours, but I surely relate and very thankful you chose a happy ending. I wasn’t sure you would but it was sweeter to cry tears of joy at the ending than pain and sadness if Beth hadn’t been able to let go. It took me around 8 years to meet my Kayleigh. She was well worth all the struggles that came before. Beautiful story

Melodramatic drivel.

What a wonderful finish to what promised to be an absolute train wreck ending.

The best. Just excellent. Thank you very much.

Loved it

I seriously didn’t like Beth at the start of this part. I just kept thinking “dude, you have a wonderful woman there, get out of your own head”. I’ve felt those exact thoughts that Beth felt when she took out those pills. But her character development was really great to watch, and I’m glad she got her happily ever after.

Also JC, I’m glad you found your Kayleigh. 😊

I’m lucky enough to have found mine after 3 (very short) failed attempts, and we’ve been together almost 6 years.

Great story, 5 stars as usual! I didn’t know how you would wrap everything up in one chapter but damn it, you did it.

Can’t wait to read “Beautiful”!

See you then!

I love happily ever afters! I was rooting for this ending and am so glad it came to be

omg, I cried through all 7 pages, and still crying. Thank you, thank you. Heartbreaking and happy endings. Cant wait for the next story. You are wonderful.

When I logged on I was so excited to see chapter 5 but devastated to see it was the final chapter…your characters seem so real , I always hate to see the end. Thank you so much, I am glad you went for happily ever after. Can’t wait for your next story

This was another amazing chapter in your stories. Very emotional and tear inducing words. You write beautifully and I can’t wait to read your next chapters. 100 stars

I was surprised to see this posted today. You took us on an emotional ride, i was mad, sad, and then tears of joy. Needless to say, I enjoyed this story. Thank you for sharing.

What a magnificent piece of storytelling, excellently conveying powerful emotions! Of course in real life things aren't usually fixed so quickly. Therapy is ongoing, and it takes longer to sooth a hurt than to cause it.

This chapter wasn't as much of a surprise as the previous one. It was only one of several ideas that I had, but after the last chapter my first thought was roughly along the lines of this chapter, except that Bethany and Kayleigh didn't reconnect. Leaving Bethany without Sally or Kayleigh would have been an equally good ending, but too heartbreaking for many of us. I note, however, that Bethany says that Kayleigh was the first person to love her. So, once free of Sally, I think she would have had a chance to find happiness with someone else.

Clearly the story is mostly about the change Bethany has to make within herself, but - and it may just be my interpretation - I also see Kayleigh adjusting to reality. Once Bethany is free to commit to their relationship, Kayleigh takes her back, even though Bethany's love is not (yet) everything that Kayleigh wants.

The "existential quandary" made me wonder if there was something autobiographical in this tale.

Wonderful writing. Thankyou.

Thank you for another beautifully written work. This final chapter, especially.

You are an amazing writer! So glad to have you back and this is one of your best works to date. Please keep sharing with us!

What a wonderful, wonderful story so well written. Thank you for this and all the others.

Another beautiful romance story; thank you. You are literally the best on this sight and there are a bunch of excellent writers!

This seemed like a dash to the finish line! I got to the pills and went back to see if there was a warning about self-harm....it just seemed like a darker side than the crashes you've written before. I hope it wasn't part of your reality for whatever subset of this you lived. Kayleigh = Kelly in one paragraph, I think. And I find it hard to believe that Kayleigh, the not quite fully self-realized counselor would let Bethany in and then jump her bones in the same evening, but of course we are all happy she did! A good story. I'm not sure I can say it will supplant a couple of your others as my favorites, but definitely one I'm glad to have read!

Epic. Out if the Park perfect.

I laughed, cried and was overjoyed st the reunion , the weddings (both of them) tears of joy and remembering my own version of this story. I imagine the tensions between Sally and Bethy could ease and they become great friends again without the last from before, each others God mothers perhaps?

Anyway, thank you for such a beautiful piece and sharing it with us.

Your best yet and that's saying something.

Fiona x

As a near hopeless romantic you had me at the title alone. I am happy with the outcome, but could see/feel your angst/even indecision as this poignantly beautiful love story played out for us. Thank you for sharing a piece so close to your heart. And by the way: Nothing like grilled cheese sandwich and tomato soup — I often dunk the sandwich 😊. Looking forward to Melanie’s story and have long wanted you to explore Macie from Hero Worship — a troubled young woman. 5 🌟 as always.

I loved this. I didn't see how it could ever work with Sally, but for the longest time Bethany could not get past that. I'm glad you had a happy ending, both for your story and for yourself.

Realistically this story didn’t have to end this way. But a (believable) happy ending is never a mistake. The world can never have enough happy endings. ❤️❤️❤️

Thank you for another wonderful tale.

Thoroughly enjoyed the story. The roller coaster was worth it. Keep up the great writing can’t wait to read what is next!

This story has me shook. I've been around here for almost a decade and it's only the second time I'm crying. I'm still feeling regret for the loss of Sally's friendship. Maybe now that Beth is over her they can somehow be in each other's lives?

Should make this into a movie.

Outstanding. Thank you for this beautiful story!

Thank you, this was so well done. But then all your stories are well done. When Kayliegh walked out of her life I was upset, then when she thought about suicide I was mad. Then with the birth of her nephew and her seeing the picture of her having a baby with someone she loved, I was hopeful. The break up with Sally was very much needed, if she was ever going to find that. Then leaving, and going tout find Kayliegh I was holding my breath. Would Kayliegh give them a chance? This chapter was a Rollercoaster ride. 5* but it deserves so may more.

Commenting again, because I can't get this story out of my head.

It feels so right and so wrong. I was very happy for Beth and Kayleigh to finally find love and peace, but I was bummed for Sally standing further away in the church and symbolically in Beth's life, showing her belly from afar. Those two were best friends forever, it's bitter for them to miss each other's milestones.

I think I'll keep in my mind a future with them getting back to (or rather finally getting to) being friends, real friends and spend holidays and such together with their new familes.

Great story, well done.

That last chapter hit a nerve. Kinda like a wake-up call. Can't thank you enough for sharing your talent.

I'm so relieved and happy ... for Kayleigh!

She deserved the happy ending most.

Thanks for another wonderful story!

A great conclusion to a great story. The breakup with Beth, while expected and necessary, still came as shock. You have this ability to draw us into your stories like we’re actually one of the characters, which is not something most non-professional authors can do. Please keep up the great work and I look forward to reading your next series.

Another tour-de-force from a wonderful writer,utilising the whole emotional scale from A to Z in the telling.You were able to bring all your various intertwining storylines together in a very interesting way,as well as creating very humanly believable characters.Thank you.

Dammit! It's over!!! :>(

🌟🌟🌟🌟🌟 wow wow!!!! Such a wonderful story. It had laughter, anger, lost, and of course love.

A little triumph of a story with a nice "Will they, won't they?" touch of drama. You did the right thing giving us a happy ending, otherwise I think you would have needed to go into hiding from a lynch mob of angry readers. Keenly awaiting your next.

Well as usual I read the story from start to finish in one sitting.

What a talent you truly have, I have enjoyed each story and now I am looking forward to the next.

Please do not succumb to the need to have an unhappy ending, we live in a crappy world full of sadness and unhappiness...... with your writing you make people happy, you give hope, you hand out tears of joy and lots of smiles. Keep up the good work, be one of life's positive influences, .... nothing good comes from unhappiness, we need happy endings.

Especially your sort of happy endings.

Ok you get the point.

Thank you for all your hard work.

Excellence shines through once again!

I loved the entire story. I had tears during this chapter and I am glad it had a happy ending and the closure of the Sally part was tear jerker. I thank you for sharing this wonderful story with great characters. I was rooting for everyone.

Loved it, That is all I have to say. And also so glad that you decided to go with the happy ending. I do not now if I could have taken it if Bethany and Kayleigh did not find their way back together.

Your stories are always so filled with emotion, but I think I cried more reading this story (especially this chapter) than during all of your other stories combined. It was beautiful, if not heart-wrenching. I was fully prepared when I started this chapter that this wasn't going to have a happy ending. The pieces were all there. So happy that Kayliegh had it in her for a second chance, and the possible glimpse that maybe Sally doesn't have to be entirely excised from Bethany's life for them to be happy.

Thank you once again for sharing your beautiful tales with us!! Eagerly awaiting Beautiful, and even more so Macie's story.

Five stars because I can’t give you six!!!

i got my happy ever after ending well worth the ride all so very happy you got your happy ending with a moment contemplation looking forward to Beautiful be happy well and safe a fan shayne

Beautiful story in every way.

Beautifully written, as ever, and a beautiful exploration of hang-ups and getting out of the loop. I am glad to hear you thought about giving the story a sad but realistic ending. You pulled off the alternative happy ending brilliantly and with insight. Thank you.

Thank you. We needed that.

I am so happy they got together :)

As usual, stunningly beautiful work!

Thank you for sharing it with us

I liked this story. At times I was worried that "someone" was going to screw this all up. I am glad you opted for a happy ending. I can't wait for the next story. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

I have enjoyed all of your stories and thought Mitch was excellent. Now I have to come up with a word that goes beyond excellent.

Wonderful. For a bit I really thought you were going to let Beth continue down the path of stupidity. A wonderful bit of stringing it along. Thanks for a great story.

I am crying… sad and then happy…

I will come back and write something more. I literally have to study for my job interviews this week but I couldn’t hold up without reading when I saw it posted…

so much love for Bethany & Kayleigh!! and other characters too!

Great development of your characters. This is a revamp of a 50s-60s Lesbian pulp fiction novel. Similarities; angst-filled heroine loves straight friend, straight friend remains heterosexual. Angst-filled friend ruins relationship with another woman because she is not the straight friend. Differences; angst=filled heroine does not have sex with straight friend, does not commit suicide, and is able to move on to a full relationship with the other woman

Wow .. what a great story. Thank you so much for this. It ended just the way I wanted it to. You’re so talented.. going to read the rest of your stories now. Thanks again !! 🥰🥰

Reading this was a rollercoaster of feelings. It made sad, upset and happy at the end. You are great writer and I am big fan.

Can we all take a minute to appreciate Keyleigh's thoughtfulness? Recording the proposal when she knew Beth couldn't, making sure her rival -basically- didn't miss her moment... Wow. I could have loved her just for that.

The beauty of it is not only that Bethany is together with the woman she loves and is loved by, but also that her bravery in opening up to Sally means that they can now become (or come back to being) best friends without the friendship threatening the marriages of either Bethany or Sally.

I was fighting tears for most of the time after Kayleigh left and Bethany came close to suicide. Thank you for a beautiful resolution to their lives

Great story, again. And you were right about the tears… The only disadvantage of your writings is, it costs me a lot of sleeping hours since I can not stop reading till the last page. Great job. Keep writing, please.

So nice I read it twice

I was not ever sure how this could end, but I did believe that for Bethany to come out in a good place, she hads to have the honest conversation with Sally, and really had to get out of her orbit. I had no clue whether she could find her way back to kayleigh. I am so glad she did. Yes, went thru some kleenex and lots of tears the last couple chapters....and I am a 70 yr old straight guy, but one who is a sucker for a well written romance. Which this was, in spades. I love your heart, Lady. Thanks for sharing your stories.

Wow! I went through so many emotions reading this series! And I'm excited to read the new series to come.

Beautiful, beautiful story. I'd love to have an update on them. Did they have kids? Did they stay in touch with Tim and Sally? What about Nat and her family?

Absolutely Wonderful story. Love the ending. I can relate.

Cant wait to read your next masterpiece.

What a wonderful story! I love your writing, please keep the stories coming.

JC ..... Yes this chapter was intense and kleenex was in good use ...... So all in all a lovely romantic enchanting tale ...... Just remember a line from you, about this is being partly out of your RL, so i hope as you're irish and kayleigh as well, you has been lucky as well as layleigh ...... Bethany and her past decade, oh yeah falling in love and in misery, and every day your goddes is so close but so fare ...... This is heartbreaking

A wondeful tale and lovely written ten hearts 💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝💝🍀💋

I bet your speech to text tool had trouble dealing with the parts of this where you (and likely I) were crying... Definitely a powerful story, very glad you've managed to get it written and out here, only wish I could give it more than five stars.

Excellent! So emotional even "knowing" they would end together. Thanks. Waiting for the next one.

An excellent story, as always. You have gift for creating compelling characters and throwing them into intense, yet plausible, situations. I look forward to your next story.

A minor quibble but please consider checking Google before making classical music references; by my count, you were 1 for 3.

At first I was disengaged no characters grabbed me But then I realized they were as flawed as me. Your depiction of Bethany with the pills was so accurate (as a survivor of suicidal depression). Everyone will be better without me and then an angel or a vision brings you back. You are either the best writer in the world or have had this happen to you or someone close. I hope it’s the first because I don’t want the second to happen to anyone. Back to your story Bethany and Kayleigh became so real fractured in love and believers I did bring out the Kleenex. Keep writing please

This was so, so, so good! I stayed up way too late on several different nights reading this. I just couldn't put it down. And this last chapter was such a catharsis!

Kudos for a really sensitive, authentic treatment of suicidal thoughts. And also for helping teach people how to deal with them in a safe way.

Finally, thank you for talking about Bethany and Kaleigh starting a family. I always knew I was a lesbian but I wanted children so, so, badly and I was dumb enough to believe that I had to marry a man. I married my best friend and I'm mostly very happy. The sex just sucks and I'm dying to savor a woman. I just wish I had known that I could have had both a wife and children when I was younger.

Love, a closeted soccer mom

I am not sure where to begin, as I wipe away another tear and sniff, that was such a powerful chapter. Over the last few years I have really enjoyed your writing, reading stories multiple times, but this is by far your best. You kept me guessing how this would play out the entire time. Thank you for the happy ending. Although Bethany finding what she wanted in life and starting her new chapter in life would, even without Kayleigh, would have been a suitable ending. BTW, not sure if there is a Korean fusion BBQ place in real life but now I have some new flavors to add to my own BBQ and experiment with. Thank you again for sharing this story with all of us.

Loved this story!!! Thank you for writing it

I feel for everyone in this story. Even for Sally that was vastly left out. She lost someone as well. There is no mention of siblings, so I'm guessing Beth was like a sister to her and it's very hard losing a sister.

Yes crying happened reading this beautiful story

SO GOOD !!!!! I'm a 72 year old veteran of 3 wars and this story somehow managed to almost bring a tear to my eye's.

There were so many ways you could have taken this story and you kept me guessing up to the end. This is your best story yet. I'm looking forward to your next one already.

This was a beautiful and wonderful story, and thank-you for the happy ending, even with the tears and struggle to get there. I am so happy you found your Kayleigh! Thanks for sharing, your work is excellent and I've enjoyed everything you've written and I look forward to reading "Beautiful" when it's ready!

Thanks for sharing your talent with us!

Well that was a real emotional roller-coaster of a ride. Throughly enjoyed this story, you have a remarkable talent for writing great characters.

Can't wait to read your next work.

An absolutely amazing and wonderful story. Crying happy tears.

It is my understanding that things tend to get bigger inside our heads. So, at least part of Beth's struggle was the fact that she never told Sally anything. I think that after Beth confessing her feelings (either earlier in their lives or even now that Tim appeared), things could have settled without so much pain for everyone (including Kayleigh and at least a couple girls more before her) and without a need for such drastic and painful measures as pruning Sally out of her life. My conclusion is that communication and honesty make our lives better. Easier said than done, though.

Anyway. It was a lovely story. Emotional and thought provoking. I went back and re-read it and it still made me cry.

I really hope the almost suicide part was not autobiographical and I'm very glad you found your Kayleigh. May we all do.

PS. I'd also like to have an update on everyone involved. I got invested in your characters.

I was warned to bring Kleenex but I didn’t listen, which was a mistake!

90 Comments already - and counting - a testament to your writing abilities. A 5-star job. Thank you for completing your work before posting.

Shame on Blind Sally for not seeing Bethy's Love for her. It's almost like she treated Bethy like a loyal pet.

At first, I thought that Clueless Tim was always there chirping in Sally's ear when talking on the phone or suggesting tagging along was because he saw Bethy's Love for Sally and he was nervous about their relationship. If Love is blind, then Blind Sally is perfect for Clueless Tim.

It's easy to be judgmental and look at what seems so obvious in another's relationship and say that Love requires the truth, the whole truth and nothing but. It’s also easy to rationalize our own half-truths in our own lives and not be totally honest with ourselves and the people that we care about. This is a good reminder for how we should be living our own lives. Mean Molly was honest, brutally so, but it was because she Loves and cares enough for her sister to be honest. We all need a Mean Molly in our lives.

Thanks for sharing.

I've read and I love all your stories, but I have to agree Openmarriageohio - this is your best so far, because the characters and their struggles feel very real (and my sincerest admiration and applause for writing so empathetic and well about how a depressed person feels inside). When the metaphorical storm clouds showed, I couldn't put it down and had to experience (I deliberately use this word instead of "read") how it would all turn out. It deeply moved me (and I also felt Sally's pain, having to give up her best friend). When Bethany decided to leave her unrequited love for Sally behind her, I heard the lyrics of Florence & The Machine's "Shake it out" in my head.

I also agree with anonymous that things would probably have settled with less pain if Beth could have told earlier, but hiding her love for Sally must have become second nature to her, they great big fear of losing what she only partly had. Then again, I'm a straight cis man struggling to not let his former Kayleigh become his Sally, so what do I know?

I'm so happy that you found your Kayleigh, and I hope that any past depressions don't have much hold over your present. Thank you so much for sharing your stories and your talent with us and making our world a little brighter!

I’ve never commented on a story but wow. This just felt visceral and raw. Thank you for sharing.

This story was beautiful. Sadly when she was staring at the pills is a moment I connected with far too well. That's because I have never had love and don't think I will. Thank you for sharing your art and your heart. I'll be sure to read your next project.

Five stars are not enough. Thank you so much & looking forward to your next story

I had to take a day away from these characters before coming back to comment, only partly entirely because I was crying too much to type when I finished reading your story. I wish I had read this nearly 15 years ago and been able to let go of my Sally, although I'm sure I wasn't in a position in a position to accept the reality of it all back then. Please, please keep writing these stories.

A story beyond the stars we're limited to in rating. I am aware it could have ended differently. So happy Bethany took responsibility for her feelings and got therapy. Loved every minute of reading even the tears feel cathartic. Thank you so much!

I was waiting for the whole thing to be published before i started reading and I'm glad that I did. I had a long journey and read the whole thing in a single session. Your story managed to keep me engaged for hours without losing my interest. I love the way you write sex - lesbian sex in erotica tends to get repatitve for me, but you managed to keep it fresh.

The characters in your stories are so fleshed out that they feel like real people. After reading the whole story, I was thinking about how Sally must've felt when Beth, and that happens very rarely.

I read the blurb for 'Beautiful', and I'm eagerly waiting. I love stories with divorced protagonists.

Damn, that’s an emotional roller coaster and no mistake! Whatever our sexual preferences, we’ve all had our “Sally”, but I’ve never seen the agony and hurt of it put into words as well as I have here, you’ve managed to put a painful, tearful and sometimes not very clear situation into a very well written piece that doesn’t pull those dark, emotional punches, but ultimately comes good.

I understand why you considered making this a “not happy ending”, let’s be honest, real life rarely allows a second chance; by the time partners pull the pin on a relationship they’ve already made their mind up and taken enough hurt to prevent that ever happening, fortunately I’m glad you did make it a HEA, 1, because I was emotionally invested in the characters, and 2, because despite reality being just outside of our comfy Lit existence, in here it’s ok to want to live in a world where everyone can live their own HEA.

Many thanks for writing and posting to you and your editors, cheers, Ppfzz.