All Comments on 'Untouchable Fate Ch. 01'

Loved it! Can hardly wait to read the next chapter!

Excellent development of the setting and atmosphere! I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

cant wait to see what happans, did the husband see the slave in the darkness

to read the next chapter! It was an enjoyable read. The way you wrote the story using the italicized words added a bit of mystery to the story-line. Once I saw what the words meant, parts that weren't clear, became clearer and the words I actually "understood" made perfect sense!

Great story!

Honey

Lust. what could be better, that thrill of breaking the rules...but the possibility of getting away with it. Tasty story. excited to read the next installment!

*hugs*

v~

(fellow blanket sniffer)

I loved this, though we learn little of her looks. What was her body like under that sari? Indian women often have such exotic skin and the finest of breasts. We had the nibbles, but where was the main course? What did he look like too? Scant detail, though my mind worked overtime and pershaps that was your intent?

Are your panties soo damp that you are more busy with urself than writing the second part.

how long should we wait?

I hope there is a second part to the story - I liked the story a lot, probably more so because of the added factor of caste tensions. I could identify with Adhiruth, and agreed with his tension - pleasure conflicting with pride.

I found her desire for forbidden pleasure conflicting with disgust very believable as well.

One hoped that there would be more than lust on her part, a fetish for taboo flesh, but your potrayal was more realistic. A picture of someone spoilt is coming together - she dislikes the thakur to the point of injury, but he treats her well; there doesn't seem to be obvious abuse. Maybe something develops in the next part.

I was hoping for more description during the sex act, since you do describe everything else really well. Nothing wrong there, just a different style.

You transported me from the desert in Southern Nevada to another continent. Your writing was delicate, and very sensual in this piece, I hope you continue it.

Brian

drksideofthemoon

I liked the conflict between the traditional roles and the taboo of untouchables with the reality of sexual attraction. That added to the impact of the story. Well done.

Og

yaar plase continue plz plz incredible donot have words to praise this remarkable writer:))

Great story you have here. I can almost visualize the fear of breaking caste taboos and the rainy night while mistress and slave fornicate in the forest.

The glossary at the end was a nice touch,