All Comments on 'Upon a Savage Shore Ch. 07'

but the chapters are TOO SHORT! Looking forward to more. Only fifteen?

I think there could be a sequal story after this about them going on adventures as a family they seem to becoming.

Another great chapter to add to a thoroughly enjoyable story. Thank you.

I can't wait for the next chapter

Just remember, "they're aliens." The minds that create like this are "not right." lol

Hah.

Sums it up nicely, eh?

@TJSkywind

While I'm normally the guy saying (in regards to the stories on here, not life in general), "Be happy with what you already have", I agree with you on this:

WANT MOAR.

Why is there a must have for Lesbian sex in every erotic story with 2 or more females? Couldn't there, at least occasionally, be a female of some species that is "hetro" only? Other than this I've thoroughly enjoyed your story. Looking forward to chapter 7.

Please continue quickly...

Quote: "Why is there a must have for Lesbian sex in every erotic story with 2 or more females? Couldn't there, at least occasionally, be a female of some species that is "hetro" only?"

Why? Because it's your worst nightmare: your cock isn't enough! MUAH-HA-HAAA!

But seriously, mostly it's because it shows an empowered and independent female species capable of making their own mating choices without having to simper and wait on the male to show them the ways of the orgasm.

A Pride of lions is all female; they hang out together and hunt together, and only bring in the lazy male lion when they need his cock to make cubs (which he will also kill if he gets jealous, about as controlling and insecure as some human men about bisexual or *gasp* all lesbian female groups).

Most guys into Sci-Fi are pleased with females who know their own bodies well enough to be able to please themselves and each other, and are not threatened by a little mutual pussy-petting (especially if we are included and welcome, AND get to watch!) A guy who wants to restrict them or feels threatened by not being the only source of pleasure around must be pretty insecure himself and lacking in empowerment and his own feeling of self-worth.

Love the story so far

Observer7, I normally would not post a comment on my own story, but I want to make a clear and emphatic statement regarding your post and that of the anonymous person who expressed disappointment with a particular aspect of my story.

PEOPLE ARE ALLOWED TO HAVE THEIR OWN OPINIONS. We should be willing to defend or alter those opinions if we are presented with information or reasonable arguments contrary to our beliefs. However, philosophic discussions are not what this story is about.

Observer7, you made several erroneous statements regarding prides of lions and you made an unwarranted attack against a person you do not know. You did this, I think, because you found fault in his/her statement and felt the need to defend your own opinion. The sentiment is understandable. The approach you took is not acceptable.

“Why? Because it's your worst nightmare: your cock isn't enough! MUAH-HA-HAAA!” – I find this statement incredibly insulting and vastly immature. It completely undermined the strength of any subsequent argument you might have made. For no other reason, I believe you owe “Anonymous” an apology. Don’t bother posting it here, though. Enough space has been taken up with this subject.

I will not take up any space detailing the errors about lions, but I will tell you, your statements regarding lesbian relations in sci-fi are too broad and are certainly not universal. Regarding my story they are, in many ways, incorrect. You lack information on the jZav’Etch culture so it is understandable that you could not make a solid argument in this particular case.

“Anonymous”, jZav’Etch females engage in lesbian sex because it is an extension of mutual grooming. Males do not engage in mutual grooming or gay sex because it would leave them vulnerable to a powerful predator capable of killing them and ending their line of successful genes. This is also the reason males do not engage in extended intimate encounters with their mates who are also powerful predators capable of killing them. Males do not even sleep in the same room as females if it can be helped. jZav’Etch live in fear of their mates, though they would never admit this fact because that would make them look weak. Weak jZav’Etch (male or female) do not achieve success.

“Anonymous”, I suggest, if you do not like stories with lesbian content, you should write your own. Write it well and people will enjoy it. There will, I think, be comments asking why your female characters are not having lesbian relations, but I’m sure you will be able to explain the reasons to their satisfaction.

For future reference, anyone making such comments as Observer7 has chosen to make will have those comments deleted. This is my story and it is my responsibility to moderate the comments. I will do so without prejudice. If you wish to present your opinions in a polite and reasoned manner, I will accept them, even if I disagree. Make unwarranted or inflammatory attacks and I will delete the comment as soon as I read it.

This discussion is now ended.

To all of my other readers, I apologize. There is no reason you should be exposed to such behavior. Please enjoy the story.

There is a different reason for the female on female action . That's the way the author wants it. Someone wants a hetero only female they should write there own story and leave this to the rest of us

I really really this story, it's damn fun and for the first time the character acts kike a true militar. I keep being reminded of Generation Kill characters. The Commander is a very fun and interesting character, and compared to her the other two seem bland and simple satellite characters. Ii think you noticed that, and is using their frendship to make up for that. Liam is cool and fun, and he doesn't feel like a Gary Stu, but it would be nice f you developed him a little, but he is a very good character all in all.

I have some problems though - first, you spend way too much time describing Liam, ion great detail, and you spent almost nothing on the girls. No detailed description to any of them.

Two, Clotilda ( I hate that name, from where I', from it's a chicken name, like Fido or Rex) ius extremely underdeveloped, aside from matter related to Liam, we know and see very little from everything else. The same, in a lesser extent is true to the big gal.

Theee, for al you talk about the Big Gal and Clotilda having to kill Liam for some offense, never once anything similar to that is seen on their POV. It could be the Commander fucking wiith him though.

That's all I can think. While the basic premise between this story and Kita'Hala are very simiar, both stories and characters are radically differents, and while I really enjo Kita'Hala and think that the female character is one of the best I've seen here and an excellent example on how to make us know and cara for a character, I like yours better. You don't take yourself too seriousy, like my favourite story here, Path of the Necromancer, and that makes this much easier to read and to immerse. Taking itself too seriously is definitely the main problem of this section. Cheers and keep writing!

PLEASE KEEP WRITING ! I need more of this story. This is one of the best stories I have read on this website. You must do writing for a living, as your style is so polished.

A new follower of yours,

Pamella

If it's not a trouble, could you maybe add a glossary at the beginning or end of one of the chapters to explain what the various terms like Chisq' Kah' and Chaq' Ka' shisk mean? Cuz' right now we have no idea what they refer to and its slightly disconcerting. But other than that, one of the best stories here. Many thanks for your effort.

I like what you are doing here. keep it up.

One thing I was thinking about is the lack of satellites for the scout ship. I know it crash landed, yet it had time to do a super scan of the area. I just imagine the deployment of cheap UAVs or staellites such an obvious thing. Even in the life pods, I was thinking mini-floating robots or blimps. I know his suit can do awesome scanning and such, but still. Also, I was surprised the lifepod doesn't have a carbon nanotube tent or canvasing. I know you run into a the problems of making surviving a problem with access to advanced technology...but if he has a food sensor and hover gurney, seems like he should have access to a tent and rope.

good stuff

I'm very much enjoying the characters, well done.

Jason

Meow meow.

This is my second reading I love it I just wish you would write more of the story .

Third read through, just as good as I remember

"Heal, leg," she growled softly. "Heal or I shall cut you off and find another."

That was done so well, made me laugh as well as admire her.

I love this book. Thank you.

You are probably not reading these post any longer, but I just wanted to let you know what a great story line!! BTW, great proof reading!!!

Heal leg or I shall cut you off and find another

Now that was a great line

Clothilde - French, from a Germanic personal name, composed of the elements hlod (famous) + hild (battle). The most famous bearer of the name (c474-545) was a daughter of the Burgundian king Chilperic who married the Frankish king Clovis and converted him to Christianity. From the Oxford Dictionary of First Names.

A name to be borne with pride.

Enjoying the story, thanks for sharing. 5* every chapter.

Dixon (UK)