by Tinolt
While being a little all over it was a great visual and something I would love to be apart of! When does she come back!
I thought the principle was good, but it was bit scattered. Could have done with reigning in to a bit of a structure.
But I liked it alot, hot and HORNY!
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great idea...the writing isn't developed as much as it should be...a little too all over the place but all in all a good story..
what kind of person wrote this? Without wanting to offend, It's not good.
I hope you enjoy my story and I look foward to hearing what you have to say. I can see that the over all impression is a good one but I want to make my stories the best! Tell me what you would like.