All Comments on 'Valentine Spell'

Your writing is a little rough, but that will get better if you study and, most of all, keep writing. Your storytelling is already very good, and that's a gift. Good luck.

Rumple

The problem with this story is that it reads more like a summary than a story. Instead of seeing the things that happen play out, the readers are simply told what happens, leaving no room for emotions or character connections.

Work on fleshing out your work more. Support the storyline with dialogue, actual conversations. Write as though you are in the character's head, looking out, and seeing every little detail as it happens.