by dweaver999
The Pizzaboy tipped it over.
When I pretent this part was'nt there, the story is just perfect.
I busted out laughing at that partially hopping they play with a sub couple named norville /shaggy and velma
Putting aside the writer's genuine talent, all the focus on safety and trust goes out the window by Valerie blowing the delivery boy. Are we to assume he's clean? Some friend is Francine, potentially exposing her best friend to any number of STDs.
Not enough Charles....the Pizza kid seemed over the top for me.
and a fabulous concept. I've enjoyed other stories of yours and this is first rate also. Thank you for the situation, characters, and development.
The development of Valerie's submissive identity is brilliant. You do a wonderful job of capturing the ambivalence of a submissive - desire vs. fear and embarrassment. I know that is what is so powerful for me, and when I can find the courage to submit, I know I have accomplished something rare and difficult. Thanks for putting it into words so well.
Gods, I LOVE your stories! Can't wait for the next ones... please don't stop!
Dani