All Comments on 'Voices in My Head Ch. 03'

Too bad he doesn’t have a sister, but ‘Aunt’ Gina would be interesting.

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Aunt Gina is a possibility... The girl friend is a possibility... the neighbor... the woman from the department store... there are several ways this can go... still kind of writing itself...

Get an editor

Magic effort. Truly enjoyable looking forward to future instalments.

You are doing a fine job, Enjoying your work as intended. If someone wants to volunteer to edit, welcome them. Otherwise they can go buy stories and not expect perfection on a free site. Looking forward to the continuation.