All Comments on 'Vulnerable Silence Ch. 02'

Probably 1.79 on this part.

to a felony perpetrator. TK U MLJ LV NV

I don't understand but I'm an old man!

HOLY FUCK!!! This is awful

OK, you've got a potential of a story here. Take it, develop the background ("Flesh it out" on the bones of the story) then find a slow witted person you have to explain in simple terms what's going on (a very old plot device so everyone can keep up) You get ONE STAR,,,,find an ediTURD to give you a hand. You've got potential (well, we all do) but this is going to take a few rewrites. So, get some 3 by 5 cards, put down your characters, then put down what happens on the "Flash" cards, then you can re-arrange them as required. Takes less time than to do a complete outline. THEN do the outline. Then put some flesh on the bones. Then have an ediTURD polish it a bit- then submit for publication. Good luck!

Really is there going to be a 3rd or are you out of Ideas? Talk about Lame !