by Gorcq
Your story was well written, your characters believable/realistic, and the scenario a very erotic one. It sounds as though you've opened a proverbial Pandora's box as far as where this story's world could go, and I do hope you continue with further installments.
...the shorter the tale, the more diificult it is to create a fresh world. You found a good balance and set a fast stage for your characters. MP2 :-)
Short, but not bad. Its always nice when good customer service it acknowledged.
At least try to make your ridiculous fantasy vaguely believable and stop wasting our time.