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Click hereWanda's eyes bulged with shock as Raphie pulled her to his body. Wanda's pelvis pared Raphie's erection down for an instant before sliding under her pelvis. Wanda felt her knees shake as she felt Raphie's hard member slide across her clitoris. She could feel his body heat through her swimsuit. Wanda let out a shocked gasp as Raphie's erection pushed spandex into her open vagina.
For a second, part of Wanda wanted Raphie inside of her. She couldn't deny that she was deeply attracted to him despite his caustic personality. Wanda was attracted to him for all the reasons he was different from Julie. Raphie was a pretty boy heartbreaker that oozed confidence. While Julie was a rugged brawler protector that lacked confidence despite his obvious strengths.
Reality kicked back in as Wanda felt Raphie's hand slide down her ass crack and into the elastic waist of his swim trunks. Raphie was actually about to try and enter her. Wanda was shocked the determined intent in his eyes as she felt his burning manhood rub up against her inner thigh in an effort to slip into her bikini bottom.
Wanda crashed her forehead into Raphie's vulnerable nose. A red flash of electric pain shot through Raphie's mind as he grabbed Wanda's swimsuit top again and yanked her into the pool as he stepped to the side. Wanda belly-flopped painfully as her bare breasts hit the water. Her mother and Solomon rushed to her aide as she came up.
As the pain in his nose started to clear the weight of what he had just done hit Raphie all at once. In his peripheral vision, he detected movement. Icy cold fear ran through his spine at the thought of Julie's presence. A wave of adrenaline hit Raphie all at once his only hope was to catch Julie by surprise and run like hell.
Raphie turned and planted his feet as solid as he could and his knees and shoulders exploded in motion as he flung his hands forward in a shove. He looked into Tanya's angry eyes as his hands hit her shoulders with all his might. He watched in shock as Tanya somersaulted backward. Raphie was so stunned to see a girl coming at him that he forgot to run after he shoved her.
Raphie had been terrified of Julie or even Elijah after taking liberties with Mona in the pool. Looking at the prone Tanya, Raphie thought of Duane attacking him at his boss Springer's behest. Raphie felt a slight sense of relief when he saw Duane still seated with his girl, shocked at what was happening but not rushing to defend his boss's honor.
Raphie's relief vanished as Springer's hand exploded across his face. Raphie felt his lip break across his teeth. The Mexican Duran family had always been a boxing family. Slaps were what they used to call sissy fighting. Springer changed Raphie's thinking about slapping with one strike.
Unlike the rage he felt when Wanda had hit him, Springer made Raphie ashamed. The stern light in the man's eyes let Raphie know that Springer considered Raphie a second rate man. It wasn't that Springer was a successful businessman or commanded respect in a world violent dangerous men. Raphie had rubbed elbows with wealthy and powerful men who practically ran the state.
Springer acted with integrity. It made sense to Raphie what the beautiful young Tanya saw in the older man. Before Raphie had written the whole relationship off as a sugar daddy and gold digger fling. Raphie felt truly ashamed. He admired Springer so much, he would do anything to be the kind of man Springer was. Springer sensed Raphie's conversion.
"It's time for you to leave son. I don't know what got into you today. It seems to have passed. If I ever see it again, we're going to finish this conversation." Springer said to Raphie.
Raphie was able to leave without further incident. He would clearly never be welcome in Elijah and Mona's home again. He would also do well to keep some distance between him and Julie for a while.
The incident cast a shadow of mixed emotions over the rest of the party. Adina had noticed how hard Solomon had been staring at Wanda's breasts while she had them out. His reaction made her quite jealous. Adina realized that much of Solomon's reaction had been due to the fact that she had been making him go slow. As the daughter of a very successful black church leader, Adina felt pressure to to proceed slowly in all relationships. Solomon's reaction to Wanda's chest made Adina realize it was probably time to put out before Solomon strayed.
The biggest reaction was from the older members of the family. Elijah Mona and Sheba had always been sceptical of Springer's intentions with Tanya. Seeing the impressive way Springer put Raphie in his place really impressed Elijah and Sheba. As the party wound to a close, Elijah and Sheba made their way over to Springer.
"Listen, I'm really impressed with how you handled things today." Elijah said shaking Springer's hand.
"Thank you that means a lot." Springer said looking Elijah in the eye.
"Yeah, you know I wasn't crazy about you dating my daughter at first." Sheba said.
"Oh yea, you definatly gave me that impression." Springer laughed.
"You really showed me something today." Elijah said.
"Actually it was really your wife and daughter who were showing stuff today." Springer joked.
"Hey. watch it. Just when I'm starting to be impressed with how you treat my niece." Elijah replied.
"Well she might be your niece and your daughter but I'm crazy about her." Springer said.
"Yeah that's pretty obvious. It looks like you're getting serious." Sheba answered.
"Well, she did agree to move in with me." Springer replied.
Sheba and Elijah stood in stunned silence.
- COMMENTS
Pugzillaover 3 years agoAuthorNo, I'm not done with the series. I'm working 60+ hours a week right now. On top of that, it's been a little crazy in the world. It's hard not to get caught in a time suck wormhole every time you go online. My phone is brokenish and close to being broken enough to replace, when that happens it'll be easier to squeeze writing time in.
I have a bit of work to do to finish up the Three Wishes storyline. I've teased some of the outcome in other stories. I'm going to set up the conclusion to the hotel encounter shortly too.
Anonymousover 3 years agoAre you done making stories?
Can we please go back to Wanda's 3 wishes and where her husband got mad and aftert the hotel. If you are done I understand
Anonymousover 3 years agoThis is literally the shittiest story I've ever come across on this site. Too many characters introduced for no reason, and stupid relationship descriptions like "x's sisters daughter" rather than "x's niece" or "y's daughter"
Pugzillaover 3 years agoAuthorAs a fairly productive writer who takes an active part in the comment section, I have mentioned the curious mix of genre fans in the LW category a few times in the past.
It was most often after I got a savaging in the ratings or the comment section. I have a small fanbase who sometimes feels the need to defend me or offer encouragement in the face of negativity.
The LW fans are notoriously hard to please, mostly because there are distinct and separate fanbases. There are the ones that want to steal a woman from their man. There are the ones that want the wanton woman to be punished for her discrepancies. And there is the group that I try and write for the "cuck" fantasy crowd.
The "cucks" inspire a strong reaction from the other groups of fans. The guys who fantasize about steeling wives think "cucks" are wimps. The punishment crowd doesn't want the wife to get away with her acts. I'm aware of this reaction and am ok with it. The readers are allowed any opinion they want and can have any reaction to my stories they want.
The only time I feel a need to defend my work is when it's a short comment that doesn't give me any inside into the problem. "You Suck" isn't very helpful. And I will solicit/request further feedback so I know if the problem was a story/content problem or an execution problem or a bad technical writing problem.
I'm never mad at the commenters. I appreciate the feedback. I comment on the negative feedback because I want to encourage readers to leave more. I enjoy the dialog about the issues I write about. Some of my core steady readers take my dialog with negative commentors as hurt feelings on my part. Or a defensive reaction. Or as I put it "war" I was stating that I don't get upset about the negative reactions to my work.
The reaction I have gotten from this entry has me thinking I should write a planned entry that will address these requests sooner rather than later. By sooner I mean drop the stories I'm working on and get the story done this week.
Anonymousover 3 years agoSounds like the email was encouraging a wronged husband doing out some well deserved retribution. How all these stories should end IMHO. And he divorces.the cheating slut all the better. This is a win win, dont see how its implied you'd be warring with anyone. Of course the sender thinks.were turd monkys which is juvenile but he has.good suggestions.
Pugzillaover 3 years agoAuthorThis message contains feedback for: Pugzilla
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Loving Wives
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Hey buddy,
Your onto a goldmine here and it may help you with your taking the action too far dilemma. You can actually give the LW turd monkeys what they're always crying for.
For the full effect you will need to have Wanda succumb reluctant or otherwise, either way she should love it and can't get enough. Then after the hot affair Julie finds out and does what Julie does. Upper cuts and mother fuckers for everybody.
The LW crowd would be ecstatic with two pages of Jules pummeling Wanda's abusers into dog food. You'd get your views and win over the crowd that hates themselves.
Of course the sex should match the intensity and level of detail to win over the rest of the readers. Win, win. Have your cake and it it too. As I'm read into the Wandaverse I know they are heading for a divorce so it seems like it could be the building blocks.
Just some thoughts
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Thank you for the feedback. I'm not really at war with the LW fanbase. I respect and appreciate how voracious they are as readers and am very happy that they engage at the rate that they do.
I have an entry that might fill that premise planned for the future. It might be a bit of an unreliable narrarator story. It will probably have a healthy dose of slime ball character dark edge but should fit criteria for intense details and maybe a Julie based ending.
The divorce will actually give me tons of opportunities to flip that dynamic about a bit.
Thank you for the feedback.
Pugzillaover 3 years agoAuthorI'm attempting to build up Springer as a character. His sobering effect on Raphie was meant to establish that he's more of a distinguished and accomplished character. The intention was to play up his quiet dignified strength and power as opposed to Julie's raw violent energy. I want to contrast Springer to the dirty old men characters that populate my Wandaverse.
Julie was there but it all happened so fast. I wanted Wanda to step in when Raphie was acting up and inflict some physical damage. I get a fair amount of criticism for the damsel stories early on in the series. Wanda and the other characters physically fighting back plays well with the female readership.
I title everything in the main storyline Wanda so readers can find them easier. It seems to be easier to direct Literotica newbies to my work alphabetically.
Thank you for taking time to leave feedback. I should have something new up soon.
Anonymousover 3 years agoYou literally wrote a paragraph where a complete slime all, as you have written him, does a 180 morale correction after being slapped. There is nothing slow about this conversion. I laughed so hard reading that it was so far out of left field.
By the way was Julie taking a shit in the house. He was a nonfactor and Julie is anything but a nonfactor. And should it not have been titled Tanya Shacking Up? Or at least Wanda: Shacking Up.
Glad your writing again. Looking forward to more. Thanks.
Pugzillaover 3 years agoAuthorI wasn't accusing anyone specifically of one bombing my work or even suggesting that a one rating might not be a legit rating. I'm sure that I also got fives from fans who might not have liked this entry but didn't want to discourage me from continuing the story. I do appreciate all feedback from ratings to number of story views to the most valuable feedback comments. It lets me know if what I'm doing is working or not. Sometimes a negative reaction is actually what I'm going for. Not all my characters are meant to be likable and not all their actions are meant to get a positive response. I mentioned the one bombing authors get just to let people know we pay a price for our actions. I acknowledge it is somewhat manipulative to post in the LW category when my story lacks much of what the genre fans want in a LW story. The price I pay is an annoyed group of readers. Comments are always appreciated because they directly let me know what the reader thought instead of leaving me to interpret ratings and number of views. Literotica gives writers a tremendous amount of power to delete negative comments about their work to prevent harassment. I would only use that in response to extreme trolling or a dangerous level of harassment that Literotica also monitors for anyway. I would never start or participate in a flame war in the comment section for the sake of views but I have seen a comment flame war drive a decent amount of traffic to a piece. With some of the controversial topics in erotica fantasy a thoughtful exchange is quite appealing. I guess that is why I find myself in so many youtube and Wikipedia rabbit holes. Thank you for the feedback and response.
26thNCover 3 years agoPug, you gave reasonable, measured responses to comments on your story. I appreciate that you didn’t delete unfavorable comments and didn’t have a temper tantrum. I did not one bomb your story.
