All Comments on 'Watch Me'

Nice storytelling. Rough talk to Leandra but not cruel; playful, not mean or savage.

A little editing could be useful but the basic story beats every first-posting that I can remember.

Thanks again for sharing. Keep up the good work.

Wow! Very well done. Not badly written and hot.

Not a bad story. The scenario is good as are the descriptions.

Word usage is a problem (passed/past, fell with a thumb).