All Comments on 'We Become Swingers'

You write pretty good, but you really need an editor, or at least edit your own story before publishing it because there were some very distracting problems with it.

First off, were there two black guys, one younger and one older? It made me wonder the way you kept referring to the dude as an "older black man" then as a "younger black man"--which was it? Was he younger or older? Also, one time you say the guy had a 12 inch cock, then at another you said his was 9 inches, which, according to your story, is the same size as your main character. And BTW, a 9 inch cock is NOT small, if you really want this other guy dwarfing your main character's cock you need to give your main character a 4 or 5 inch cock.

In 15 years of living the swinging Lifestyle and watching my wife play with lots of other guys, I think we've run across a cock near 12 inches maybe three times, but we've seen more 9 inch and way more 4-5 inch. The average is 5-6 inches. Anyway, just a few thoughts, take 'em or leave 'em.

JacknCarol

also if i may add ,,, a woman that has 42 dd breasts is not exactly small!. shes probably built like a brick shit house.

I seriously think you should consider a re-write using all of the advice in "constructive criticism's" comments. I liked the story line, but the problems with the story were just much too distracting. It's off to a good start. How about an editor? Good luck with your writing.

"Now she's had a big cock up her, you can be sure that she'll will want moor"

If they are swingers, he's gettin' some, too.

I married a wonderful woman who had never been into sex. Prior to the marriage I'd had a number of discussions with her about all of the things we could do such as swinging with another couple, using dildos on each others ass, etc. She wasn't overly excited about it so I dropped the subject for awhile. I made sure to let her see me jacking off while watching porn flicks especially those with gay and lesbian individuals in them

after some time had passed I caught her fucking her cunt with the big black dildo she was really working it into her holes, moaning, etc. The next day I took it and rammed it up my ass pussy, while sucking on another one. I waited for her to come home and catch me. I had never told her that I was bi but mainly queer. I was hoping that things would work out where she'd get into fucking other men while i got fucked by some and suck them off. i didn't rush things. She eventually got to where she would come home with cum all over her. That was fine with me. From there our sex life grew. we both got into cock sucking, being ass fucked and many other things.

liked the story but again, another inconsistency.... you have been married 5 years before you get the wife a big black dildo,, then say she is 21 years old when you party with the old/young black male. So... was she 16 years old with floppy hanging down 42DD breasts when you got married? Just another little problem that a good editor would help you tighten up on. Good luck with your future stories.

Having a hot wife who enjoys Ebony is always great. The story started a bit slow for me but picked up really nice. I liked that the wife got her fill of a nice long cock and an ebony cock as well. Hope you have more stories posted to share about watching the wife go black.

I love it xoxoxoxoxo Annette

Finally an author that kept the husband and wife together for wife sharing this bbc...other authors take note...the only correct way..nine if this BS of going separately