by CarlusMagnus
You've edged us emotionally for a while now. They need to realize they are IN love with each other and move forward. I can't remember, other than the mandatory "over 18" statement, where they are in life. First year university or seniors in high school? I have to go with 4* this time. No real plot movement and sex is repetitious at this point.
This has been very enjoyable. You’ve made the characters people to care about and root for. I hope they work it out.
Please stop this senseless waste of letters!
We can‘t, we shouldn‘t, we mustn‘t, we do, we have to stop - again and again and again.
Watching a washing machine is not much more boring!
I like the story, but like a television series with a 1 hour story, I don't think stretching it out is making the story better. If you want to make this into a series, you need to bring more characters into the story and flesh them out.
Actually, you can begin by fleshing out your main two characters.
I'm going to end off at this because I do not want to listen to them continually arguing with and amongst themselves about fucking or not fucking.
~IRChristo