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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 3 years ago

Poorly written. I didn't get far because present tense is irritating, made worse by your confusing who's doing what to who. The story itself may be good but needs a complete rewrite.

Good luck, thanks for your effort.

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Always was into heels and hose, started dressing at 18. Stopped for a long time but recently started again. Like telling my story. What I write is true and actually happened to me!