All Comments on 'Wedding Vows'

Hell of a way to start a marriage. Wish I was there.

relax let the story flow.

Wow. What a horrible way to start a marriage. Why get married if you're both going to fuck around?

And everyone shared some lovely STD's!

Quotation marks are NOT optional.

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Learn how to write a paragraph. When I saw the one starting with "I staggered to my feet...." that went on and on, I stopped and gave this a 1.

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When Amy moved away was a good time to start a new one. When Amy returns is another, and so on.

So very very HOT. Do not listen to the grammar Nazi who read and then pick your story to pieces. Far too often they post nothing but hate and no stories of their own. You have talent. This story needs a part two. Maybe an anniversary party for parents or other family. Very much looking forward too many more chapters. Thank you for writing.

I thought, from the standard of this attempt at writing, that it must be your first.

Imagine my surprise when I looked at your list of stories!

Has NO-ONE every told you how to show what is INTENDED to be "speech"??

It got so confusing that I gave up when I had to read passages through three times to work out what you were intending to say!

I didn't even finish the FIRST page!

I've been generous with 2*!

Loved it. Touched on almost every one of my kinks. I’ll definitely be rereading this one.

Great story, until it went guys sucking on guys….

Wow, longest paragraphs on record. They make it hard to read, btw. Otherwise, wow.