All Comments on 'Week at the Beach'

I would love to see where this goes, a few minor errors in the story but not enough to ruin it. I like how you left out the character discriptions. Keep up the good work!

that was seriously hot..it made me cum twice!

Why do people always think this is a Pulitzer prize contest. This is literotica, not ENGLISH101.

Enjoy the stories for what they are, and not for what they are not!

Get over it people...enjoy life, its far to short to be worried about a few spelling mistakes or misplaced commas or periods.

WAAAAAAYYYY too much information!

Loved your story! Real or not. We had a great time reading it. I hope you plan on writing more. I would like to know how the next meeting went. Thanks!

if he was so uncomfortable around her then he would have stayed at home or at the very least gone back to the cottage when she stripped down to the bikini. keep it atleast somewhat realistic people do not act like that. fiction has to be based on reality if not it is fantasy and there is a seperate area for that. incest is only good when it is believable and no way this was.

I don't cxomment on English and misspelled words, I spell some wrong myself sometime. It irritates me when the writer gets the names of the characters mixed up for a paragraph and then straightens it out soo although I don't always comment. There was one I read last night. Keep writing, Xarth, I enjoy your work.

People do act like that. Not always, of course, but who is able to say how someone will react in a given situation? So the guy (was he ever named?) could well have done just as in the story, and that's what made it a story. Xarth's genius is on recognizing such unusual reactions, and using them. Do keep it up.

if you can't do it properly or take the time to use a good editor thenDON'T DO IT AT ALL. writers are suposed to be putting the readers in a spell with their stories all the stupid errors pull us right back out ruining the story. this story has no background as to their relationship before this and was way to rushed. what happened here should be spread out over months not days. the brother has to have time to work out his feelings the sister seems to have done that before the vacation. get a good editor and do a total rewrite on this so called story and don't post anymore until you find a GOOD EDITOR to help you.

Quite possibly the best writer on this site.

Keep it up.

Good job Xarth, I enjoyed the story as well as many of your others. The way you left out the character appearances allowed the imagination to fill in the rest.

On the pill total crap

The story is inappropriately named...should be "DAY AND HALF at the Beach" Their romp the first day in the water was fun and jovial, and a nice "hello" from not seeing each other for the past two years.

Even the nice touch of "brother" late night sneak into her bed was the "beginning of something good", as Humphrey Bogart said at the end of "Casablanca". After that the sex was...just sex, like the kind of a much used pussy of some left-over female after lights out at the local bar or pub.

Though I like the writer's stories for the most part very much, this one, I hate to say, left something to be desired, badly and greatly desired. For the sex, lust-only driven sex, of a brother and sister, not seeing each other for two years, there was no foreplay, no compassion, no feelings, and most certainly no consummation of their first ever coupling! Not one of the writer's better undertakings.

HAHAHAHA!!!

What a fag.

Really - is that all? You set me up for a really good story and just cut it like the phone being hung up mid conversation. I don't necessarily mean that this story would entail multiple chapters - after all, there are only two characters - but a little development and romance + a little follow-up sex would have been welcome. Something like having sex while they could hear their parents haveing sex in the next room, even though the parents are never really introduced into the story.

Great potential, but the story ended too quickly. Not much buildup, not even enough time to know and care about the characters. You've done better.

Very nice story!

Only criticism is that the story could've been longer.

Good read and a bit of a different twist on the agonizing that can go on in some sibling love stories. Sometimes you just gotta say "What the fuck!"

I agree with other comments. I would have like for this story to go on a bit longer. More chapters would be great!

Good story, well written but far to short.

It was a good story, but seemed to end too abrduptly. They need more time, we need more story.

I don't now if this late in it's history you're reading these comments but------.

These are supposed to be short stories people!

I don't care if there are a few errors. The human mind can still read it.

I do believe you have a lot of talent. Fortunately you have a lot of stories and I'm enjoying them as I can. Please keep adding to them.

I love this story. Great story to add more chapters.

Literally, great flow!

No real back story to explain the attraction, but who cares. It was still sweet and leaves lots of room for it to go past the physical into a full blown emotional relationship..

Loved this well written and realistic. 5*

He should have stayed deep up inside her filling her pussy with is cum

Would have loved a creampie. 5 stars

Another story set up, then left unfinished... Only 4 * because of that...

5* all the way for yet another smoking hot story of two siblings, leaving us plenty of room for imagination as well as room for a sequel if you ever wanted to.

He didn't have her number? Silly ending