All Comments on 'What a Train Ride'

I liked it. It’s a different idea. A little more resistance would have driven the tension higher, but as a new writer myself, I definitely get the desire to keep the submission short. I think it could make a very good 2-3 page read if you ever re-visited it one day. Looking forward to your next work.

There's a definite potential for intense eroticism here. The narrative has a light vfc and easy flow (pun absolutely intended). I look forward to more offerings.

I loved this story, perfectly written as a mystery and erotica!

Wow.. hottttt

enjoyed it. KEEP WRITING AND SUBMITTING!!

What a great story, well written and highly erotic. Good job. WRITE MORE. That's an order.

Very well written and I'd love to see what comes next

A very well written story. You really made the unbelievable believable. I am following for more.

Well done, thanks. As a male writer it’s fascinating to read your description of female sexual tension. Every bit of insight helps my work. I’d have liked this one to be at least 50% longer so you could “flesh out” the sensations, the anticipation and the shame aspects a bit more.

Fantastic! This is a great start for a series too

Interesting premise.

But only the setup for what comes next.

Four stars.