All Comments on 'What Has Just Happened?'

less than half a story is less than half a score

was there a point to this meaningless headless tailess drivel?Isthere a part two?

WTF is with the unfinished 'stories' lately?

So, all her husband did, other than lie about the extra set, was Jack off while watching Rose with other band members?

part two sometime i assume?

An interesting beginning to a story which could travel in several directions.

Interesting for a 2-time writer. I liked the plot, fairly original way of catching your band member fucking around on you. But, not to discourage you, the writing style was a bit labored and distracting. Too much descriptive detail about elements that did not warrant embellishment. Have you considered making use of one of the free Volunteer Editors who might show you how to smoothen the flow? I found myself reading this and 'rewriting' many of the sentences to make it sound better. Keep on keeping on!

Good so far. Asking the question: is beatin’ cheatin?Waiting to see where you go from here.

OK first paragraph!

Ally is meant to be a High School teacher. Reasonably intelligent. So why didn't she get out her phone and record what was going on? Now it will be simply a "he said, she said" if she confronts her husband. Instead she did NOTHING.

This is good if a first chapter, weak if that is the ending.

Where’s the rest of the story?

could we end up with a female cuck?

She'll ditch Dean and do better with husband #2.

Another unfinished story. Waste of time.

Good setup. You could have gone further with this; longer stories do better than short ones.

Good start, so what happened next?

"WHAT HAS JUST Happened?"

Well, process of elimination, a story worth telling DID NOT happen.

So that narrows it down A LOT.

"WHAT HAS JUST HAPPENED?"

Process of elimination. A story worth telling DID NOT happen.

Good start, is there to be more?

These stories where everyone runs away are getting really tedious.

Literally 99% of people would confront a sack of sh*t like that right away, so that there was no ability to deny and lie.

Nobody wants to put effort into crafting a more "real" feeling story.

Its more of the same old, same old. Its just a dickhead cheating this time.

1/2 a story?

No ending?

Put chapter 1 in the title, stop wasting our time, I get its a free site, but trolls like this 'writer' are posting more and more.

A simple rock through the widow would due .

Divorce is a no brainer. She can do better. If it was reversed he would go for the jugular.

the ending is coming?

Interesting, but one would really like the authors opinion;

Hi Guys,

Thank you so much for all of your feedback regarding the story.

It is my first ever story so I apologise to those who may not have enjoyed it from both the grammar and plot point of view. I simply wanted to write a short story and see if it got any interest (before taking the time and effort to write more, I should have put part one on the title, that's my mistake).

At this point I will be writing a second chapter, and will continue the story as long as at least one person is enjoying it. Hopefully I can get this chapter completed soon.

Thanks again guys, I have two other stories I am hoping to continue along with this this one, Please check it out and let me know what you think. Thanks again.

**Great name for this story!!!! What Has Just Happened???? A boring story with no end!

I’ll wait to see where you take this before commenting, but I find her description as a mini Kim Kardashian off putting. Who wants a shorty with fat lips and a humongous ass?

Where is the rest?.

Why can't I send a comment using my user name

Can not rate story well that has no ending.

Finish the damn story, please

Your writing is good, better than most BUT, please let us know what happens when he arrives home. A nice beginning, a solid middle but then when the resolution should be there is nada.