All Comments on 'What the Truth May Hold'

James deserves the truth, need a part 2 where the promiscuous bitch and the depth of her depravity will be revealed

2*

Infuriating

This needs a second part. Just to clear up a few things.

Did the husband see the wife's car when he pulled out of the car park? ETC

Good one!

So you let her off? Or, is there a part 2?

"There is a no sex in this story, but I feel it still belongs in the Loving Wives section. I'm sorry if this disappoints you,..." - Actually no, I am not disappointed. I prefer stories without the sex. It takes more effort to write an engaging story without resorting to the gratuitous rutting and romping of so many would be authors. They use sex as a distraction, smoke and mirrors as it were to disguise bad plots, misspellings, and the lack of decent proofreading. My only misgivings about this story was the last section dealing with James and Amanda's texts to each other. Is James still in the dark? Did he see Amanda's car pulling away as he exited the building? Is this going to be opened up as a new "February Sucks" free for all? I really wanted James to have truth and justice come his way as we know just how big a 'sleating chut' Amanda turned out to be!

I’m not a fan of leaving a story ending in limbo. The ending was rushed after the build up.

Finish the story. OK?

not done and nneds to be finished..

what a stupid ending

She escaped by the skin of her teeth!

4

It amazes me that still even now, people are still believing that love is betrayal. The willful ignorance is beyond the pale.

Oh dear not very good at all

So she can just keep on cheating. Cmon. Sorry 1st.time you only get 2 stars

Cool twist to the story! 5 stars

Like it or not, most of the time they get away with it.

Good story.

What a cunt of a woman.

An author who writes these stories shows a mentality born into infidelity….

I pity your family as u will soon be caught and loose ur children!

And?

Courageous ending for this category. 5 stars for interesting story and most of all for bravery beyond the call of "duty"?

Really needs a second part.

I wanted James to be a bit more stalwart, he was wimping out when there was no real reason to. Nevertheless, I liked the tale.

Hate story's where cheating whore's get away with it.

I'm torn. In theory I like the idea of a wife taking an opportunity chance to course-correct and save her marriage. Scared straight is a thing. It would be a nice change of pace from the repetitive LW themes. And this story is very well written.

But at the same time, I halfway hope James catches sight of Amanda as he leaves the hotel, leading to good old-fashioned B burning.

Either way its a good story.

Hoping James discovers he's married to a liar, cheat, slut betrayer and gets as far away from her as fast as he can. Amanda has no clue what true love means. She loves how he makes her feel and what he gives her but she has no love for him in return. Love includes active fidelity, she is selfish and without love for anyone but herself. She never sacrifices for him, but expects him to sacrifice for her. She's worried about losing James, why? Because SHE will feel bad and have a tough time, not because of what she's done to James. Not sure why so many authors insist on these idiotic "I still love him with all my heart" delusional characters. She's evil, James needs to save himself.

This was pretty good but could have used more. Dont feel as if she should have gotten away with it. should have some consequences. Him finding out and fighting and maybe work on reconciliation.

One or two more paragraphs for a proper ending would have raised this from a 3 to a 5.

Seriously ?

Well done, I enjoyed that. I felt there would be something of a surprise at the end, but truthfully I didn't foresee that. It leaves me wondering if James actually saw Amanda leaving the car park, and maybe leading to a second installment? Personally though, I don't think the story needs it, sometimes it's good to leave things hanging, leave something to the reader's imagination. There are a number of ways this could go, I believe whatever happens a good portion of your readers would be disappointed.

Good as it is, in my opinion. Thanks for a fresh idea

Good story nice twist in the end…

She knows she’s a terrible person but she won’t change.

Oh it would have been so much more satisfying if he had caught her, and why would Pete give a damn about protecting her when he was already caught?

I know that James didn't want to know himself but if she could do this once then she could do it again and again. Her pledge to be a better wife doesn't really mean much as long as she's holding on to this secret and disrespected her marriage before already. I hope that this story gets a sequel where her adultery is truly revealed cuz otherwise it feels incomplete.

But you'll probably score lower for stopping before she suffers the consequences.

She got away with it. And the story gave no hint whatsoever that she learned her lesson.

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3 ***

James kind of deserves this for being such a wimp.

Wait, so did James see her leaving the parking lot?

Silly nonsense not good fiction

Ah, but did James see her pulling away? Good story.

It wasn't so much a surprise ending as an incomplete ending. I'd say you should write a second chapter to FTDS, but the main character is a moron and simply not worth caring about enough to find out whether he remains stupid and married or ends up stupid and divorced.

2 more sentences and this is 5* story. But this way it just makes 4*. It could end either way but the way you left it, opens up a nice second story line.

Pitiful ending to what was a fairly decent story. Bitch needs to burn.

It wasn't so much a surprise ending as an incomplete ending. I'd say you should write a second chapter to FTDS, but the main character is a moron and simply not worth caring about enough to find out whether he remains stupid and married or ends up stupid and divorced.

You didn't say it, but it would be cool if James saw her pulling out of the hotel parking lot and put it all together. It would definitely change Movie Night into something the cheating bitch deserved.

I hate when the sluts are getting away with cheating. Fuck. This should have a second chapter. Something like hubby isn’t so wimpy and dumb and has a light going on.

No rating this time even if it was a good read. Damn.

Captcha

3* because cheater got away with it

Too confusing. The author’s writing failed to make the story plausible

FTDS

Until she funds someone else and cheats again.

She doesn’t really love her husband. I hope he caught sight of her car as she drove off.

suck ending. would have been much better for James to catch his wife after being such a wimp about everything before.

No shot that’s how you ended it lol tf. Give us the ending where he saw her car leaving and put the pieces together so he doesn’t look like a complete moron

WTF!!! Burn the fucking cheating cunt in the frying pan..

OK, that's the introduction out of the way now where's the story?

So so. 3*.

To baf he did not catch her getting off the elevator on the 7th floor.

You need another chapter but otherwise a good start. It seems that Brandi is not a crazy woman after all

Writing is good.

Psychologically, the plot left me depressed. Guess as an author a reaction is a reaction is a reaction.

Keep writing.

MLJ

Most excellent. Love the ending.

Not sure if I totally agree with the ending but I still enjoyed the story very much. It really kept me guessing about what was really going on.

5 stars.

Great story, good twist at the end, did not see that coming. Would like to see chapter 2 where James finds out Amanda is a cheater. Especially since there is James coming out when Amanda pulls out of the parking lot, could be interesting? Maybe a 3-some with Julie?

A great story, would like to see if James talks to his wife about the day? Do we see a 2nd chapter

Hard to enjoy a poor guy being made the fool. He deserves better.

Needs another chapter this is unfinished

I'd like to think he saw the car drive away. It really makes you think how it might play out when he sees her late.

Great story. 5stars.

I liked how you made Brandi seem like a crazy woman. Every detail about her suggested she might be delusional. But that hotel room scene clarified it all, I did not see that any of that coming. Then everything after James leaving the room was just icing on the cake.

Great story. Thanks for sharing

I enjoyed the story-line, but think that you need to offer an addition to the story. Let James somehow learn of his wife’s involvement in the affair, and let him deal with it. Amanda doesn’t deserve to get off without James knowing the truth.

Need another charter where she got caught.

Decent story but James comes across as a full fledged wimp to me. He needs to catch his wife and dump her. She's not going to change her spots even though she was almost caught.

Lots if good twists here, the story kept me guessing what was going to happen. You really had me guessing with Brandi, I wasn't sure where you were going with her. She was kind of crazy but turns out not that crazy. No need for a second chapter that some are calling for here, this open ending works perfectly for this story.

5-stars

So, the hotel workers never noticed Pete doing two women that looked similar? I think Brandi's investigation would have uncovered that.

No ending. Falls flat after a good build-up of intrigue.

Decent story. Would have been much better if James had seen her car as he was exiting the hotel.

Considering that her first thought was how much she'll miss being with Julie this story begs for a second chapter where Amanda gets caught.

Cheaters never think of themselves as terrible. This would have been much better had he ran into her in the lobby on her phone heading into the elevator while he was getting off. The ending was kinda just meh, another cheater gets away with it. And considering the crazy lady had email between Amanda and Pete it's a no branier that they wer cheating with each other as well as the other chick.

She almost gets caught red handed cheating and what she feels in that moment is disappointment that she no longer gets to be with the other woman. Almost ruining her marriage was an after thought. That pretty much sums up the thought process of a cheater.

Finish the damned story

Did James see Amanda hurriedly leaving the hotel Carpark?

Has he put it all together that his wife was involved with a ménage a trios involving Julie and Pete?

You left the end up in the air. Damn you.

Scores 2/5 for an unfinished story.

The truth always comes out eventually.

Would be a better story if James had seen Amanda's car in the hotel parking lot when he left the building.

Nice story.

Not the first time the husband fooled by the situation.

Won' t he be suprised when Julie's husband shows up a James work with the text messages from Julie's phone....

Keep it up

Be safe

i do hope there is a second part to this

Nice twist, but no follow up.

Hope he smartens up if there's a pt 2

Feels unfinished, but I'm guessing this is one of those writers that's okay with the story husband being cheated on as long as he doesn't find out.

What I thought of the story is: if this is like most of your stories then I would ... (incomplete!)! OH, just like your story!

Something missing?

Part 2 might be a good idea. Seems unfinished to me.

That was a devious twist. Nicely done.

Kind of original. But her getting caught is only delayed. She's only sorry she almost got caught, not that she's a cheating slut. No morals, no ethics, no respect for her husband or their marriage. Yeah, its only a matter of time. Hope someone writes that sequel. Thanks for the effort.

The very last line was annoying. "But despite everything, she still loved James and was willing to do what it took to keep him." She's been a cheating cunt. What the hell was she 'willing' to do to keep him? What did she do as a great sacrifice or above and beyond to keep him? Having to say bye to her fellow trash? That's it? No, she wasnt willing to do shit, only buy her time later and maybe plan out a different way of not being caught, maybe find new trash to rut around in.

This story needs a better ending. It just falls flat at the end.

Blah, so what is the point of this? The wife was cheating, with both Julie ahd pete. She isn't even remorseful,she claims to love James but you know she will cheat with Julie. It isn't a btb, it isn't a break up and reconciliation, it is nothing.

Need further chapters to settle the dust. I know if I were James, there are too many threads hanging that every one knew Amanda and how friendly the threesome are. They are covering for each other, and it certainly appears that Amanda is more popular than simply a work mate.

Excellent writing. Hopefully James gets a clue or and puts 2 + 2 together. Amanda really deserves a serious public burning. Let her be known as the town slut/bike wherever she goes; and of course no one would ever consider having a relationship with her past booty call.

I'd love for Amanda to go home and James say - "Amanda, something happened today and it really concerned me. I am contacting my attorney and exercising the verification part of the infidelity clause. In case you don't remember it, either of us can require that both of us take lie detector tests from someone who is still associated with law enforcement. These tests are about our fidelity to each other and our marriage. We have to pass at least 2 out of 3 tests to be considered a PASS. Failure to pass 2 out of 3 could be considered grounds for divorce. Failure to take the tests within 90 days would also be grounds for divorce unless there is an reason equivalent to a life or death emergency. If you've been faithful, you'll find out I've also been faithful; and if you desire we can get counseling to make our marriage better. If you've cheated, then you have a choice of how I will divorce you - will you take the tests and own up to your failures? Will you avoid the tests and try to ignore your failings? Will you just up and run away, in which case I will file under abandonment. Amanda, if you cheated not only is our relationship dead, but per the pre-nup you'll leave with only what you brought into the marriage and your reputation will be ruined. Which option do you choose Dear?"

Boring. The wife was cheating but with whom? The husband was definitely naive.

Hello everyone. First of all, thanks to those who gave me some positive feedback. I really appreciate it. To those who gave negative feedback, well, you're entitled to your opinion, but I think some of you are taking this a little too seriously. It is just a story after all.

I should address a few things I read in these comments so far. First of all, there won't be a part 2, the idea was to keep it open ended and making you think of what's going to happen afterwards. That's why I had that little detail about that car scene at the end. Just like in real life, some stories don't have resolutions. I know we would like to see a resolution, especially to those who deserve to be punished for their indiscretions, but sometimes that's life.

Also, to those who thought James was a wimp when he suddenly got nervous before entering the hotel room, you have to remember that earlier in the story he was all aboard coming Brandi to see if it was all true. But it wasn't until he started seeing clues that Brandi may be delusional and that she may have been dragging him along into her fantasies, that's when he got nervous about the whole thing. But he didn't run away, he overcame that brief moment of fear and went into the hotel room anyway. I think being a little nervous is a natural response to these situations, but at least he overcame that.

This was a fun and clever story. Really kept me guessing all the way through.

I had read this again to see all the clues again that led up to that ending.

5-stars.

I had to come back here to give a special shoutout to Brandi who figured everything out. She was acting like a crazy jealous wife, and I did have trouble believing her at one point, but it turns out she was right all along. If the ending was a little different, she would've seen she was completely right about everything instead of only being half right.

No sex in the story was a bummer, but still a fun read. Thanks.

Part 2 please . Good story but she needs to get caught

What's truth got to do with it?

The husband and the wife are both douchebags. I couldn't root for either of them.

Definitely needs a follow up. James’ senses were sharpened from suspecting his wife. If he’d seen her car leave the parking lot, he’d have recognized it. The scene at home…

James is a wimp whether you think he is or not. Leaving the story open ended just means you don't know how to finish or much like your MC James you don't have the balls to finish it.