All Comments on 'When Emma Met Lily'

Not being familiar with this demon stuff characters, the first few paragraphs were confusing. I would have expected less there as this was a 750-word event. I would chopped more wood off the beginning and at least had some interaction with the angel - a word or two before the gag at least? Still I'll rate this as a four for some good writing.

My only "complaint" is i still feel this idea should have been saved for a longer story. Maybe you can revamp and retell it some day.

But you know I love your writing. And Emma and Lily are always fun to hear from.

@dmallord - My first ever 750 (though my second was published earlier and is not part of the event). Track the next seven as they post and tell me if I’m getting any better. 😊 Em

@Djmac1031 - it would make a nice 5-10k story K agree. 👍 Em

5-stars, of course!! It's always a pleasure to read about these creatures!!! 😈 😇I'm still deciding which of the two is my preference...

@FreyaGersemi - thank you - I wish more people felt that way about Emma & Lily 😊 Em

Great work :) demon school sure sounds like it had some interesting curriculum.

Who knew demons could be sarcastic!

This is my first read of this series, the self deprecated humour made me laugh.

@Vitriolhack - Emma is super snarky - I hope you enjoy some of the longer stories - Emily

Your sense of humour shines forth.