All Comments on 'White Knight's Burden Ch. 02'

Huh. He managed one day, hid away from her like a lil b*tch, then snapped the next time he was alone with her...

So... more or less two days? I'mma count it as two.

Let it all out, can he split her personality and make her into one of each? True dominion and all it should work. Keep up the amazing story line. 5 stars

First of all, he’s a piece of shit. He keeps calling Claire his best friend but treats her like shit. He is Jeffry Dahmer.

Harsh? No. Because that is what Dahmer tried to do: make sex puppets out of his victims.

Finally, someone did this subgenre right. Strawmen, rushed stories, needless wish fulfillment - this is what the "corrupted by power" trope with the "thinks he's nice" character *should* be - actual guilt, actual escalation, actual payoff, and a genuinely grotesque climax. Now you just have to bring it home. How? I dun freagin' know, I'm not a writer :D

@Slofred & the anonymous crew - Thank you for your comments (and for making me laugh with the remark over how horrible Greg actually is at self-control, giving him two days may even be pushing it). I've got a few ideas for how I want this story to go, and how the boundaries of the power of "subjugation over pure mortal essence" will be explored further.

@Whackdoodle - Thank you for your comment. Have you perhaps watched the hit Netflix tv show "Dahmer – Monster: The Jeffrey Dahmer Story", a terrifying dive into the psyche of the twisted serial killer Jeffrey Dahmer, portrayed by much loved actor--and once teenage heartthrob--Evan Peters?

This is pretty amazing. Didn't know it was possible for me to be slightly horrified but also turned on at the same time, haha... Weird but awesome! Thanks!