All Comments on 'Who a King Must Do Ch. 01'

I feel like you were in high school playing D&D and WoW when you started writing this. Hoping it gets better. The premise is vaguely interesting but the execution is seriously over the top absurd. A little backstory on why the night elves would jump right into sex slavery would be nice. King is the most one-dimensional MC ever. Dialogue is brutally on the nose with no subtlety, innuendo or emotion. Ugh, so much more. Looking forward to some improvement before dropping as there are too few ongoing fantasy series on lit.