by Bob Clark Jr.
I loved it...it was so hot and left me wanting more.
What I loved about the story was the innocence of the relationship. It was very well written as I don't prefer things to be too raunchy. The development of the relationship seemed very natural while other stories tend to bypass the fact that these two people are doing something very unnatural. I hope to read more of your work
it was really good the fact that there was some background to it and that there was a reason where as many other stories i have read just 'were both really hot' thus why would they need that?
very good hope to see more.
this had depth. And i mean DEPTH. it didn't just tell the story of two people having sex, it told the story of lust, deliberate actions and mixed feelings. Other authors go in too fast i think, and this was a brilliant story.
There is nothing like the first moments of sexual awakening. A very sweet, and VERY sexy tale.
So sweet, so innocent, and just so damn hot! Very nice story.
Most of the stories on this website I could take or leave...but you are the only author that I am TRULY saddened by your absence. Your stuff is fabulous!
needs a part2 to make real goodtoo much is unsaid and undone like do the parents find out does she get pregnant since it was never said if she was on birth control what happens in the fall when they go to college part2 and 3 would have filled us in but like the typical writer on this site the story remains unfinished
I have never left a comment for anyone's work on Literotica, but I felt I had to for this story. One thing I like about it is it doesn't have 'Double Ds' and 'Twelve Inchers' flying around the place. I also like the fact that your grammar isn't severely flawed like many other writers.
Very well written, didn't bore me to hell (HELL HELL HELL :)). A score of 100.
Every time a story is about Americans I know they are going to need a bottle of lube. When are they going to learn that circumcision screws your sex life. Complete men don't need lube.