All Comments on 'Why? Ch. 01'

was great, as far as it went. However, you started by saying you had a few more chapters ready, yet nothing has appeared. Your basic plot is too open ended to make real sense without something more.

Do you need help with grammar or spelling or word definition? Give your interested readers a hint so we can be of some help to you!

I would try my hand at continuing this engrossing tale, with or without the author's permission. But, I feel daunted by the task.

I hope the author gets well and interested in continuing the best first chapter I've read in LW in a very long time.

will not change the bottom line. TK U MLJ LV NV

Will this ever get finished

This would be a great story for someone to continue...please?

and why and wherefores be damned, TK U MLJ LV NV

after that nothing......I hope the author is alive and well and having a small block and then to continue. TK U MLJ LV NV

Yes, Why, just why the hell haven't you finish the story?

I Nmean I spent all his time reading a great story and it has NO ENFING!! Come on man!! It's not right to stop here. End it please. Or tell me who wrote the ending!!!

This short garb needs to be erased until there is a story. For now its just a blog of shit.

But the ending would be appreciated.

I see it's been awhile since you posted but you said that you had other chapters so come on and post them!

4* for the beginning.

Mark, our hero, is a truly stupid git. He has the opportunity of coming out of it unscathed and financially intact. Just sign the papers and move on. Why would he even want the bitch back? He should count himself lucky and go find someone he can trust who wants him.

i have a followup to this but i am still working on it. not the authors style but my own quirky shit. give me a few months to getit to flow right. cant log on - not my computer. cantbuymy

Why?; the title alonee demands an ending. I know cantbuymy can do it.

I read your Bio and decided that waiting months and not submitting a second chapter may have been due to an injury BUT - you wrote that in March 2012 = since -Nothing!

You could have dictated something to a friend and submitted so, unless you have really deteriorated, I think you are a Jerk!

No whining to us. You appeared to have talent, I guess just no character!

Boring story with no direction

I think this story is brilliant -- so many layers. When will be be treated to the ending?

eat your hearts out and roll over...Mark is awakened, TK U MLJ LV NV

It was good story right up to the end, except, there is NO ENDING! I can't tell you how frustrating it is to read a story only to find out there is no ending to that story. UGH!

i pray that you are doing better. hopefully you will finish this some day

THANK YOU

I've read this again...for the 3rd time. I loved the intrigue, the suspense, the dispair, the betrayal. If the writer is ill then I suggest another seasoned one write chapter 2. Its very sad when a good story is abandoned beyond a writers control.

Probably the best story of this type I have read on Lit. I have to hope that the end of this tale is submitted.

We live in hope!!

Thank you for leaving the money in our bank accounts. It came in real handy to pay for the services I bought to take care of you and Miller. I would put your affairs indexed as fast as possible as you will be left a deaf and dumb quadriplegic for the rest of your life. Lover boy will just get his head blown off :). Have a nice 24 hrs of life.

Melissa is a deaf dumb quad and lover boy is faceless

Great story. If you are still around, why not post the parts you said were already completed

Even the skipping got boring. This writer probably realize how pathetic its efforts are. "1*".

Okay, you've got me hooked. But! Mark needs to sign the papers and ruck up, move out, and press on.

The rest of the chapters ARE significantly shorter. But I don't count anything near 20 of them. Too bad.

You posted the awol comment on kellyhockey's trust story, then do the same thing by leaving your story hanging. WTF...

This looks like a job for FTDS

This story deserves a conclusion.

But please finish, the story is well written and holds one's attention. Please finish it.

So what happened? You started it, got people interested and then nothing.

I don't know if this person is dead, but wow! Your comments about the person being better off dead are sickening.

for a first story, good, but you cant end it here.

Real potential and very very far from finished.

With little likelyhood it ever will be.

A good story ruined by no ending!!!

This author has cheated those who spent their time reading this story! 1 star

On 10/19/2011 author said chapters were with editor to be published at least 1 a week between Friday and Sunday. On 10/20/2011 he commented that the 5th chapter had been send to the editor. Like many others, I wonder what happened.

JL's recovering may have taken more time than expected, I just hope it hasn't turned to the worst. I have wished him a speedy recovery but it hasn't helped apparently. In any case, waht happened to the 4 other chapters? Did the editor also have problems??

Needs an ending........

If you don't do anything but this, please finish this story.

Nice story...but, as happening frequently here on cuckerotica, you are obviously unable to bring to an end what you have started. Titel is right, though: WHY don´t you try to finish it? Did you ever finish anything??

...only question is where the hell did the author vanish... It's a real pity to be left in a middle I mean seriously... This is a paperback novel worthy thing... I completely loved it, hope to see some updates

THIS is unfinished and I suspect the author may have passed on. Read his Bio

What happened, yes, I agree drop off the earth? I am sorry to say, but you got me.. with all his wandering the country side, wandering the house, old river side secluded spots they visited as young lovers. Hell I was thinking he killed her in a fit of blind rage, calmly quietly wrapped her body and without any attention focused or attracted simply buried her body. I don't even believe he actually saw his wife on the TV, it was not clearly visible but a white woman that appeared to look like his wife was kneeling down helping children. Lets not forget Africa? hum just how long would it take for his two daughters to try and get some message to Africa or to this busy billionaire and even get a response? For me the reader, her life was perfect, the two were near loners, in life, the job in everything. There is not even a worry about any one of the two daughters coming to the house, in fact neither daughter rushed to the house or to their dads side. Which ponders the question was the home life so dull, boring lacked anything nurturing that the children would leave the nest and move on without looking back. No friends, not even the neighbors taking an interest. What I am getting at and in closing, this story to me is the build up and beginning of a man that simply lost his mind, triggered by the wives position of leaving him, leaving his world out of balance. Something he could not get a grip on. If I did not know better I would almost.. and I mean almost put him with Michael Douglas in the movie "Falling Down". I would say that a next chapter would finally end with the reality that he did in fact strike his wife of 22 years with a deadly blow killing her instantly and all this is some well manufactured lie. How can I justify, well, he has not signed or filed the divorce papers in how many months now? her letter warns him and is specific and lets not forget everything she owned was left behind, why hide? The billionaire has already left his wife and children so what is alimony and child support? Now in Africa supposedly on his own visual account of a few seconds of a TV spot. No, the fact that no response to a refusal to sign the divorce papers and a push to sue for alienation of affection would or should have caused his dear wife of 22 years to quickly and not quietly make her appearance. Something is definitely wrong in this house and his head.

very unfinished. and likely to remain so.

I'm not one to finish someone else's story so it will not be me but every once in a while there is one that really needs to be finished. This is one of them and it could go in a hundred different directions.

Stupid ,,, boring story so far,,, wants to turn him into a cum sucking cuck... Why would he want the bitch back.. If not to eat cum out her stinking diseased cunt... Just another cuck

Why are there stories on Literotica that aren't finished and don't look like they ever will be....c'mon get with it eh!

Great writing, but WTH, it just STOPS

Why indeed

Jezzaz has just posted a completed story titled "Stone Cold" over on the other site that contains many of the same elements that are contained in this story. It is well written, solid, enjoyable, and most importantly, completed. If you despair of ever seeing an ending for this well received and then abandoned JLRemora series, perhaps the Jezzaz offering will give you some sense of fulfillment.

This guy is sad. He cries all the time and will not cover his ass. FDivorce her and get on with your life and find some balls on the way.

stonecold

It's on storiesonline.net

Maybe we should bug him under the other alias? I too would like to answer "why"?

My guess is that that Conrad seduces married women, takes them out of country icognito, making sure they burn all their bridges behind them. Use them up, and discards them.

Too bad there isn't anything more.

The letter is a bunch of crap. Things just don't happen. She allowed it to happen. She didn't try anything to save her marriage. She didn't talk to her husband. She in effect criticized her husband for trusting her and not suspecting anything. And she claims to still love him which of course is BS.

why have you not written anything else afterwards.

First of all, the dumbass husband should have taken the good divorce deal and retired to play and rejoice in his good fortune. Second, the damn story is not finished. If you call this finished, then what the hell was all that foot dragging, and hard searching for. To do nothing when you found out. STUPID!!!

The way this guy acted and saying he was a paratrooper does not add up. This was a stupid )no reason to write the story) story.

A better question is "When"? When is this billionaire going to leave Melissa just like he left his wife and kids. These billionaires are very fickle bunch when it comes to relationships. They either stick with their wives until they die ( such as Gates and Buffet) or they keep finding new wives (like Trump) every 5 to 10 years. I don't think that Melissa will last that long!

I don't think this story is going any where.

The story has such great potential but its been a long time and no updates from the author since 2012. I wouldn't expect one. While I hope the author is in good health the bio indicated some type serious health issue. I dare an experienced writer. To finish this story.....

When stories have been left hanging like this for years they should be removed.Any story not finished after a year should be deleted unless it is ongoing.

This might be a very good story to use as an exercise in adding another chapter for other writers to follow up on. Intriguing.

What is the point of this story and where is Ch 2?It as been that long since it was written it should be removed so people don't waste time reading it.

It seems to me that while his prose is of a high quality, this author found it difficult if not impossible to carry on with the project because JLRemora made a rookie mistake: in his effort to make his hero an underdog, he made the antagonist too much more resourceful and influential, to the point where there is simply no believable way our everyman hero can possibly overcome his nemesis. In other words, his hero and his antagonist are too unequal to have a realistic contest.

He was going for a David v. Goliath story, but ended up writing David v. Godzilla instead. It's a shame because the story starts off with a great deal of promise. I hope JLRemora finds it within him to carry on, but he might be better off rewriting this initial chapter.

A billionaire would not be walking around by himself picking up women. He would be surrounded by security men. Also he would not like the husband of the wife telling the world news that he stold the guy's wife! The news guys would be all over that story.

While it was a good start with a fair number of directions it could have gone, going nowhere just made it a waste of time.

Would have been a 5 star plus if the story was continued as promised. Great writing, exciting premise, but no folowup. Don't start something, make promises, then fail to deliver. Its unfair to readers, to the site, and to hyourself. Poor show really!

It is such a pity JLRemora didn’t complete the story. Who knows something untoward may have occurred to him/her and therefore be in no position to complete the story. I hope some other talented writer take-up the challenge and finishes the story

If this is chapter one where is chapter two?.

As stated in title.

Of a great story. Please post chapter 2

I can’t believe people are still expecting chapter 2 after all these years.

Good heavens, if you will put a chapter number on your works at least finish it.

He found Conrad Miller and Miller had him bumped off!

Obviously JLRemora will not finish this excellent story. Is there any other author who might wish to tackle the conclusion? I hope so because the storyline is ripe for a satisfying ending!!

as if divorce needs a rhyme or a reason. TK U MLJ LV NV

This was a very well-written who dunn it story with both the emotion of a wife gone away and good detective work. It is good quality.

Now, damn it, finish the story. Give us your ending and what you see and describe.

T.T.

Have your Lawyer go after The rich guy for Alienation ... But Get the divorce first sign those papers . Find a real women . My First wife was a Cheater .. The Women who I am married to Now I trust .. Trust is a Big Word in a Marriage

...be a mandated warning at the beginning of any story that is unfinished. This was an inglorious waste of time.

Authors who leave their readers hanging should be hanged! What a crappy thing to do.

far too long a story to ask the question "why" and the just end the story with a "what" very disappointed

Way too long, then no ending, no resolution, authors like this should put a disclaimer upfront stating story has no ending, avoid eating time reading it, crap!!

Well, there might be plot holes, or she was just a lying cheating whackjob. You pointed out that she had to have her own cell phone, so the records would go to her. She didn't have a job, so how did she pay for it. Sounds like she was cheating on you from the get go. Who divorces someone with no passion. Just up and left to Africa of all places, to do what, feed the poor? The guy left 2 small kids and a wife, what the fuck is up with that, and of course no cheating was involved. He left his own family behind, to what, feed some 3rd world people. How does that even make sense. I am begining to understand the title of the story now. WHY?

WHY did you write this? WHY did I read it? Just a long waste of time.

I'd rather jump the side door of a c141 than tailgate a c130

????

For all we know the author is dead.

Should have done my usual and checked comments first.

Ugghh

FTDS!

Shame the author didn’t finish it.

I remember reading this story years ago, and like every other reader I wondered what had happened to the author.

Well, StoneyWebb has just published a continuation titled "Why? The Reason".

I have yet to read it so I have no idea how good it is, but after so many years of wondering how the story would end it's a bit like suddenly finding the Lost Dutchman Gold Mine.

Go check it out (like I'm about to) to see if it's real gold or fools gold.

I do believe that JLRemora2 is the same author. The Join Date for it is shortly after the Last Update on this ID, and the Descriptions are very similar.

You did such a good job but disappeared from your talented writing,..?.

Nice Story, I gave 5* but was a bit confused because although the major person is Melissa, twice the author mentioned Janice instead:

"welfare since Janice had left, I'd never mentioned my marital problems." ....... "Not that I was looking, but a few weeks after Janice left..."

Nothing serious though, i liked it anyway.

"We've gotten to the point where we know we need be with each other." - This is the more believable alternative to, "We just fell in love," but the question remains, how did they "get to that point?" Presumably they met and felt an attraction; SHE at least is married, possibly "someone" is also, so when they felt that attraction, the proper thing to do is back off, not act on the attraction.

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Then she says, "It just happened," so which is it, "it just happened," or it "got to the point?"

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At least she left her credit cards and checkbook! He'd better get to the bank, just in case, but why leave her driver's license?

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Bull shit with him blaming himself! If she had any issues, she was bound to bring them to him, not look elsewhere. How is it HIS failure that he didn't have a chance to try? That's on her.

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"From the first day I met this person I knew there was something more than friendship involved." - Which is why she should have immediately stopped seeing him, or gone to her husband to either give him a chance to work things out or work out a divorce.

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I think her letter would help with any settlement should she return, not to mention the divorce papers she's already signed.

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He should show his bitchy daughters the letter to get them off his back.

Up to this point, the story is mistitled. It should be 'Who?' not 'Why?'. MC is preoccupied with finding out who his wife ran off with, when I would think he should also be questioning himself as to just who is this person he has been married to for 22 years that could blindside him in such a callous way.

This story is clearly listed as " Ch. 1" and there aren't ANY other stories listed on the author's list. WTF did you expect? A nine year old story would finish itself? To hell with "hang the author" - I say hang the commenter that blames someone else for his personal problems. You want closure? Go read the sequel from StoneyWebb and fer chrissakes, don't complain if he doesn't FTDS to your satisfaction - write your own ending. Ssshesssh.

Why the fuck is this dude wanksting over a golddigging whore.

Sign the divorce papers and move with your life.