by ScotchFan
Very nice story but you should have wrote one more chapter with his new life with Carrie and his mother 5 stars!!!
I enjoyed the part about the MN pond. It does get mighty chilly in the winter.
The ending was too abrupt and left it feeling rushed to finish. You had enough room to go on about their relationship and lives.
This could have had so much more in it.
I mean I like what you did, but there was huge potential for more.
Not criticism at all.
Just wanting something with more meat in it.
I await your next piece of work.
Thanks for giving us an end to you story. I really enjoyed all four parts.
It was entertaining , if not comprehensible. Good clean dirty fun in mode of Nero and Caligula.
Full marks *****