by 64udf47h3r
Well, are we going to get another chapter or two? Will Brian and Jim turn her into a willing slut. Maybe they will arrange a gangbang with a black frat or turn her over to a homeless camp? So many options to explore.
Not a bad story but the writing was terrible. Try proof reading before posting.
WOW!!! Loved it. Your wife is a fun little slut... Looking forward to the next part
The dude should just get over with it and come out, so she can marry someone that actually gives her what she needs, instead of just being a foil for his own interest in other men.
The story is too forced, there's a lot of action that could happen and Kelly's emotional state wasn't even explored. Redo the story and fill in the blanks before you go on to chapter 2.