All Comments on 'Wincest'

It sucked. You did a buildup for something, and just left it. You weren't out of time, how is their a timeline on writing? Perhaps you ran out of ideas to finish it.

It was so poorly written “more time” wouldn’t have made it better.

Why even bother posting this?!

Complete garbage. Write a story before you submit. Won't be fooled again.

Mightily, it sucketh.

This author doesn't need an editor, he needs to take, and pass, a middle school remedial reading test. Maybe he had the gall not to reread this mess, but if he did reread it, it shows that he has no idea what a sentence looks like, to say nothing of syntax, tracking, and continuity.

Even as a short, it REQUIRES PROOF READING.

Please review and heighten your scene by more directly writing that which you are thinking.

Otherwise a fun one-off.

she should have been under the table while he games!

Literally stopped reading the grammar and syntax were so bad.

Why would you end a story like that <_<

Did you run out of time because you were on a library computer, and it was closing time?

One word. Bad

Did you make it out of the third grade? Your writing skills are deplorable!

Terrible!

Words cannot describe how terrible this story is.

Toby still got a lot just for sucking at a video game. If I were Toby, I'd be playing that game yelling "FUCK" every time it was just him and his mom at home.

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Judging by some of the errors in the story, English is not your first language, or one you have mastered. Your best chance at a good story is an editor. Find one. 2🌟

What the hell was this????????? It wasn't a story it was just BS a 2