by Anitole
Dont feel like you need to rush anything. I would suggest makeing the chapters a little longer. This one though my favorit thus far was like a flash of light and then it was done. and if you dont think you can make it longer then just write up two chapters and submit them together as one part. Great story so far though.
Not a perfect story, but definitely an enjoyable read.
I hope that there are more in the pipeline to continue the plot, as it seems interesting so far!
It could have been longer but it was still a good story. I hope you get the next chapter submitted soon. Good job.
this chapter was really rushed .. almost didn't understand what happened at the end.. would be better to take more time for a little more detail..