All Comments on 'Written In the Stars Ch. 05'

Anxiously awaiting the next chapter now that I’m hooked!

kinda irritated at how much the word “Nessa” is repeated in this chapter. we get that he’s talking about her, it’s ok not to say her name every time. it’s distracting from the writing and the story sadly.

Usually I despise a 1-Lit page chapter, but this is one of the few exceptions where it feels right to cut it off, to match Nate's point of confusion and uncertainty how to proceed. What proves contradictory is how "well" he's reading her body-language cues but still wondering how to go forward.

I won't ding the story for it, because he indeed hasn't fully transitioned to seeing her as a woman although he REALLY IS with how he looks at her cleavage and notices she dressed more casual at the breakfast table. 5