by mandingo1234
Great series so far. I hope the ex enters the story too, so she can see what she missed.
3* Could have been 5, but two months between combined with serious editing issues 3 is the best you should expect.
Amazing story o have been hooked since the first submission. Wondering when the next segment will be released?
Arrrgh!!!! It is 3 days after this last part posted and I have blasted through the whole. Now I'm jonesing for the next part. I hope I don't have to wait too long!!!
Please ask your editor to read through your writing, not just rely on a spellchecker, because context matters.
"John wiped out his cock" <- if this is the intended phrasing, he is not going to spew anything after the fact.
Great story with so much potential! Really hope you’re inspired with more chapters!
Can't wait for the next part to this story, I hope it gets better from this point. It has a few good bud ups from the other chapters, but they just leave you hanging.
It has potential to be a good series, just need to be longer and have plot twists that you don't see coming.
Just some ideas bring his family into the mix or if ex fiance or more drama and romance and a few bits of violence.
Damn. I’m loving this. Hope the next chapters are coming along. Thanks
uh huh- writers block huh? well do us all a big favor and finish these stories as they are great!!