All Comments on 'You'

Pretty hot, but I was surprised it ended when it did!

That was pretty fucking hot.

Could have been a little longer. :D

Soooooo, is there going to be more? Please more, PLEASE more, PLEASE MORE!!!!!!!!

No worries, I'm working on episode 2 right now...and 3 is percolating!

Great story.

But the first-person writing is sometimes difficult to follow unless, you define quickly who "I" am and who "you" are. The reader starts visualizing in their mind male and female characters, and halfway into the story finding they now need to go back and recreate the scene. I still gave it a five.

That was a fun read! I do have trouble with the 1st person style which cost a star, but like the story.

Short and sweet!

Short and to the point (s'cuse the pun!). I agree with the first person previous comments and had to double back at two points early on, but well done to you for posting.

Oooo…..I like this!

Short and sweet, with a building crescendo … to climax!

And I am glad he asked if you are okay.

Nicely done!

Wow, that was hot, something like that would blow my mind.

Why can’t I give this a 5 star rating?

Short and hot. Got me so hard. Thanks.