All Comments on 'Your Prisoner'

I loved that it was real consensual play, and great how you portrayed their r/s like that.

It is a good story and I like the idea behind it but please make sure to edit. The inconsistent use of i instead of a capital I made me stop to try and figure out if it was intentional. Then you talk about hands behind the back but you wrap your arms around his neck. These little inconsistencies can take you out of the story. In a longer story they can be forgotten but in such a short burst they stand out.

I love the idea of the story though, thank you for sharing.

Thanks for the feedback, I absolutely see your points!

It was a good story, but it felt too rushed to truly be enjoyable for me. You could have taken more time with it and added more detail to nearly every part. It could also use an editor for grammar, but I hope to see future works from you.