All Comments on 'Zara'

Beautiful!!!

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Looking forward to a happily ever after. I understand his perspective, but I feel so sorry for Zara. Well written. Now I'm late for work!

Happy ending please.

Who doesn't like a "happy ending"?

Excellent as always

What a great story!

Well paced, wonderful characters and lots and lots of Love.

It ended perfectly but..... You know ;)

No. Do NOT write a sequel with a happy ending. You justly stated that this is more realistic, and continuing this relationship would be a terrible injustice to her. This was the perfect ending. She is now better prepared for real relationships, with their inherent passion and pain.

So please don’t give in to the sentimental saps who live vicariously through other people’s joy.

Great story and lots of room for a 2nd part to go in a variety of ways

As much as I would love a happy ending...Reality, and life. This is perfect, as is.

DS

I like happy endings, so a sequel would be welcomed.

Aawwwwww, c’mon! You can’t to that to them. They will need to have a long talk about children/no children, but otherwise, both of them have found The One. If they don’t at least try to make a permanent life together, they both will wonder…..to the end of their days. Easy 5 stars today, but you **have** to continue this.

Do Eet! Dooooooo Eeeeeeet! All the happy endings!!!!

Seriously, though, I agree with why you ended it this way. It makes the most sense. But my slave and I don't write sad stories because we hate writing those endings. Too much hurt. So... ALL THE HAPPY ENDINGS!!! 😊

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Great story.

SEQUEL!

Seriously, can't believe you left us hanging like that. Maybe they don't end up together, the age difference and college life are huge obstacles, but we need a happy ending! We need to learn more about everyone in the story, how do the 4 masturbators (one for all and all for one!) get on after college? Do Damien and Vicki end up married? Perhaps skip the college years and give us a new story with everyone.

Yes yes please! Happy ending for the two!!!

MOOOORREEE

Needed a happier ending.

Found a lot of "Sweetest of Hearts" bleeding into this story, muddying its own identity.

it was great hope part 2 soon

Continue this please

Yeah mate go for the sequel.

Give us a chapter 2 and a happy ending

Wow! Talk about robbing the cradle. Cant say that I wouldn't want to be in Scotts place though. Like some of the others, I think the ending was as much as one could hop for considering the age difference. It was only briefly mentioned, but it must have been such a turn on when the four girls were masturbating together in front of Scott. Don't know if I could have held off joining them and letting a load fly :) There were a couple of errors, but nothing earth shattering. Loved the story and anxiously looking forward to your next.

As is, this gets 4* from me, but I gave it 5* to hopefully entice a better/happy ending for both. As the younger partner in a May/December marriage, I can tell you it is worth the fight. Even now, with my wife suffering from stage 4 lung cancer, it is worth it for the right person.

It needs another chapter. Scott needs to have a new chapter even if it's not with Zara. A new chapter for Zara. Two separate roads for two amazing characters. I totally love thos story.

Would love to see a 4 year sequel.

I think your ending was reasonable but I think an addition could be warranted. True love is rare and it doesn't always fit into a perfect box of what you expect of it. I would love to read a happy ending to their story whether it's together or they find true love separately.

Loved it!

A fantasy that old guys have!

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Please write an epilogue with a better ending. Good story otherwise.

I'd love there to be more but it feels like the end. It seems to me that there is a story trying to get out though of the relationship between daddy and daughter, although not necessarily an incestuous one but a deeply loving one. The daughter inviting him into her life to see her pleasure, whilst at the same time accepting that daddy does not wish to have sex with her or the ultimate loving relationship with her. Just both of them reveling in the intimacy they share. But this story is definitely five star.

Excellent. Would love a sequel with a happier outcome though :)

Like all your stories it was great. Even though this ending is the most likely, I could see it going further. She is going to be around alot, because at the very least she is still best friends with the daughter, and its hard to just shut down those feelings. I'm also a big fan of happy endings so my vote is that.

It doesn’t have to be a perfect happy ending. They could still end up with other people, but definitely can’t leave them like this. Need more to the story. I respect wanting it to be realistic and they probably wouldn’t work irl but would like to see where they go from here

More please

Wonderful story. 5 stars. A sequel would be nice, but the HEA doesn't have to be between the two characters. Each could end up with someone else with a better age match.

Always love your stories. Ending it like this or however you feel they should get their happy endings is a great read.

So good! Sequel!!! They need a happy ending ;_;

I would l Iike a sequel.

Yeah, this definitely warrants a sequel.

Please don't have Zara slut around at university though. She's quite clearly head over heels in love with Scott, and a woman that besotted wouldn't dream of "cheating" on him. When Scott starts moping around the house because he's missing her, I'm sure Annie would keep her best friend informed.

Okay, okay… Please write a sequel. Us old guys have always admired or even perved over our daughter’s friends or son’s girlfriends. But, don’t tell their mother…

Another vote for a sequel.

I love this story!! I just wish they he and Zara end up together!! I hope your next writing will develop their relationship!!

5 stars you ended the story beautifully. No need to continue it

however, you need a story about his daughter, Katie, meeting a guy at college and wanting her teach her like he did Zara to be prepared to have sex with her new BF.

Next story - similar - Laura then Annie

Very nice, I really enjoyed it. Hopefully you will consider writing a sequel to this story.

Waiting with bated breath….

Just consider he’s not to old to raise another batch of kids! Maybe a pair of fraternal twins that spin off into another category after 4-5 chapters that moved through time quickly. Don’t be afraid to (12 years later) after 3-4 chapters of fun filled college years/raising twins and perhaps ia bit of his daughter and sons lives tossed in? Keep up the enthusiasm!

You definitely need to write a sequel there was too much love between these two. You know college kids wont love her the right way. she'll miss someone that cares about her pleasure.

I’d like an ending where they were both faithful to each other(the thought of them with others sexually kinda leaves a bad taste, in my opinion) and married, maybe have a little girl together, for drama we could add the ex wife trying to return as her current husband loses all his money and can’t support they’re lifestyle and she attempts reconciliation only to have everyone slam their doors in her face.

All in all a good read, good story with room for expansion, a few structural issues with words appearing in places they don’t belong, “from young women” as an example. Keep up the good work…. Also you gonna finish Flame Trees? That needs a sequel, it feels unfinished.

Also try not to worry so much about realism, most people(me included) read to escape reality,”.

Happy ending please!

Would love to read a happy ending

Would actually really like to see a sequel to this, I'm a sucker for a happy ending...gonna have to keep checking back.

Love the story, definitely needs a follow up. AAAAAA++++++

Happy ending please.

Happy ending please!!

5 stars. I would love a happy ending.

Still waiting and hoping for a follow-up. Happy ending preferred, but it's your story.

great story! A happy, loving ending/ sequel would be perfect

Love the story and the "realistic" ending, but it would be better as an "interim". A second chapter with a "happy ending" would be a great conclusion.

great story but it needs a happy ending man

Second half please. I need closure.

A well written and thought out story, nice characters , I,m sure plenty of dad’s will dream of doing this but not many will.

Consensus is a happy ending :)

PLEASE GIVE US A HAPPY ENDINF IM ON MY KNEES PLEASE JESUS CHRIST PLEASEEEEEEEE

Please please continue. I'd love a happy ending

WTF, Pervy or what ?

“more than once, I watched her and my daughter do it, and I was also treated to shows of all four girls, including Annie and Laura, masturbating”

Happy endings are good ....

I think there's a lot of demand for part 2 or even more

Need Part 2.

Let him make love to his daughter in 2nd part

Please finish the story

I would love a part two. 5 stars

Been reading a lot of your work, and for me, this is one of the best you have written in this category, and I would love to read a second chapter to see what live had in store for Scott and Zara, even what Katie and her friends ended up doing.

Five stars for this one mate, keep up the good work.

Having a big chest at 18 isn't all that abnormal, considering most people are pretty much done with puberty at that age. I knew a girl, way back when I was in elementary school, who was AT LEAST a DD-cup by the time she was 12. And another girl I knew in high school who was probably an E-cup when she was 15. So, yeah, Laura having big tits at 18 isn't surprising. Considering this was written last year, girls in their later teens having big tits shouldn't be news.

This is not a sad ending - it is perfect. And, PLEASE, no part 2. T

They may say they love each other, but that is not reality. She is desperate for love, having not received even the parental form. She's never even been kissed (by a male). However, he gives her what she needs - both affection and sex. She can now leave for University somewhat more a woman and mature, and find a more age-appropriate love/lover. He gets to feel good, too. He obviously cares for her, and has helped her become a woman both physically and emotionally. He stated he does not want to start a second family, so perhaps she has given him a feeling of self-worth by showing him even a young, too young beauty can find him attractive and desirable - and is now worthy of a woman more appropriate to his age to find a long term relationship and love.

Sweet, lovely story.

More please

Zara finishes just 1 semester, runs "home" and transfers to local college, etc.

Amazing story. I would like to see what you can come up with about the college years and after. The story is heart felt and interesting. Yes sad ending but the future of the story is up in the air hopefully the story can show how the girls future is

Weave more.

Well, I know there is a 2nd Chapter. I liked this story. I think I figured out what a “plank” is. Thank you, and now I’ll begin chapter 2.

Byť angličtina není nijak závratně květnatý jazyk, tento příběh má potenciál rozejít se do mnoha a mnoha dalších kolejí. Je vrstevnatý, optimálně využívá jak erotiku, tak velmi hezky popisuje samotnou dějovou linii. Jen tak dále.

Please write a continuance

i enjoyed it, I would have asked for more but I can see there is a Part 2 so I assume I am not the only one. Thank you.

stunning completely absorbed w ur story so look forward to more

@Southpaw1430 A plank is a form of modified push up where you rest on your arms held steady underneath you and your feet are rigidly on your toes. Very hard to maintain, but excellent for abdominals.

A sad ending, not the one I was hoping for... but wait. A chapter 2 I see. Dare I hope!? I just hope it's not one of those "5 years later" things, she'd been fucked by a bunch of other guys, he's screwed random women, and in the end they end up together and basically they've wasted years apart that could have been spent together. Well let's read on and find out I suppose.