All Comments on 'Ziplining To Conclusions'

Good going there Brian, nipped that in the bud without burning the house down. Should have told Shelly to shut STFU!

I hope it was a self propelled lawn mower

If our partner's response to a hall pass isn't something like, "fuck that shit. Cheating is cheating. No dice. Celebrity or not, fuck around and you're toast", then you should strongly consider discontinuing that relationship because it means they are open to cheating under the right circumstances and whatever affection they have for you isn't as strong as you might think.

This guy seems a little sensitive. And he overreacted. But it was amusing. D

Very good. Great plot and twist. BardnotBard

The epilogue was priceless. Lol. The prank was hilarious also. To be fair, doubt that anything was going to come from Corey seeing the lookalike. Shelly introduced her to him. Tom knows about it. Unless Tom and Shelly are swingers or something.

Funny.

Well done!! 5 stars. I enjoyed reading it!

I didn't expect that plot twist in the epilogue. Damn.

But seriously, she got a taste of it would be like from the other side, saw sense, and they lived happily ever after. Thankfully no lasting damage.

You got a good rating for that epilogue alone.

Gin pie e, well written, but a bit bare.

Four stars.

Short and sweet, thanks for a fun read.

Hilarious. Also funny to see all the serious comments below.

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Fun Stuph!

11/10!!!!!

Kinda dumb, or at least shortsighted. No idea why the wedding went forward without a TON of groveling.

He said "not playing" which was a clear indication of his feelings and then she dissed his feelings by going ahead.

Apparent at that moment that fidelity was not a thing for her.

Look alike is not the celebrity shall pass not effective

Clever short story

Creative intervention. Just because she went with Shelly to a lunch to check out the coworker who looked like Jamie Dornan, doesn't mean she was going to sleep with the guy. There was no granted hall pass, it was banter at a party, never got brought up again, yes she lied about why she went to lunch, but by all accounts nothing happened at or after the lunch. He got her good with his prank. Her post discovery reaction and her no more hall passes and torching hers at her confrontation with Brian and her mother suggests nothing happened. And most likely nothing would. Still an ounce of prevention is a pound of cure.

That was "solved" and accepted easily.

As a neutral observer, based upon the asinine, ignorant comment by Ic69hunter, I wouldn't put any relevance to their comments going forward.

Fucking dumb cunts. Hall passes were discussed before marriage so he wasted his time marrying skank

@lc69hunter, and that’s why women get divorced. They want a lack of rigidity about fundamental values. For me, the deception here by Corey would have put her on severe probation at the very least.

As a neutral observer, based upon the first conversation between all of them, if I was a woman, there is no way I would marry him in the first place, showing how rigid he was.

Wife seems a little too recalcitrant to me.

So he'd trust his wife EVER going out of the house alone? Once distrust seeds have been sown, they grow.

No son personas reales, son personajes de ficción....

Trust just took a major hit in this marriage. Now he will think she is out screwing around on him.

5 Stars on the lawnmower alone . Hall Passes are stupid . If my wife wants a hall pass then we do not get married

'I eventually saved up enough to buy a new lawnmower'. Worth 5 stars for that line alone!

Finally one where the crowd can't tell you you didn't finish the story.

"I eventually saved enough to buy a new lawnmower."

Sweet.

Ok story. I guess I'm glad there was nothing untoward happening.

What if she just packed up and left after his 'joke'?

Particularly enjoyed the epilogue, it really tied up all the loose ends perfectly.

5 Stars as I love My New Lawnmower . I can cut the grass in half the time so I can work on My 69 Boss 302 or watch TV . No My Boss will not be the fastest car around but it is 1 sweet ride .

I'd ask that guy to tell me when the lunch was going to happen and if I could I would show up. If not, have that guy take a pic or something so I could challenge her while it happened.

5 stars. Nothing quite as great as a new lawnmower. Oh and the story was okay.

I liked it, lmao!

5* just for the epilogue.

5 points!

I rarely find such quality and enjoyment as this tale offers.

Great!

LOL, that was damn good! Just maybe he scared her enough to be faithful from that point on. Wouldn't be much of a marriage if he had to keep tabs on her. 5 BIG TWINKLING STARS!

If you have to do all that to keep your spouse faithful. I'm not sure that's someone I'd want to be married to🤔🤔.. how does he know his little game was enough to get the "hall pass" idea out of her head? I mean the talk in the car with the threat of canceling the wedding wasn't enough. Cause she was still thinking about it 5 yrs later AFTER the wedding. She knew his feelings on the matter T

than. So I'm suppose to believe after 5yrs of her thinking about it, to the point that she was willing to meet her "hall pass" doppelganger to fulfill her fantasy, she suddenly got it? 😂😂😂😂 yeah ok.... if you're dating/engaged to someone that thinks a "hall pass" is OK. I suggest you run and run fast. Cut off that relationship ASAP and thank God you didn't make the biggest mistake of your life marrying this person. There's no such thing as "Hall passes" " Sabbaticals or any of that nonsense in a marriage. Nobody would marry someone who thinks it's OK to take a break from their marriage. Divorce is expensive! there's a lot more involved than just walking away.. especially if you have kids with this person. Cause now you're trap. You leave you're going to be paying alimony, child support,, house payment, etc. So, yeah, I would definitely run if my potential spouse even thought sleeping with someone else is OK at any point of the marriage.. if you go ahead and marry the person anyway, you can't be mad🤷🏽‍♀️🤷🏽‍♀️.. The person told you who they were.. who's fault it was you didn't believe them?.. be mad at your damn self.. I would've gave this wife enough rope to hang herself. You can't save her everytime her pussy starts twitching for someone else. The only way to know she won't let her pussy do her thinking for her, was by seeing how far she was willing to go with the look alike?.. I think if he hadn't pulled his little trick. She would've been down at the motel 6 getting her back blown out by Mr look alike the next day...

I think he let her off too lightly,whilst she might not have done anything,she did meet her celebrity.

There was no marriage-respecting, husband-cherishing rationale for the lunch with Mr. Celebrity Lookalike. A cell phone pic would have sufficed if he had to brought up at all by the needs-to-be-unfriended Shelly.

Corey definitely still has some 'splainin to do. Her heels are looking rounder and rounder.

4 - cute story.

But it certainly highlighted a stupid set of circumstances that can

come back and bite you on the ass, when you least expect it.

WHY tempt fate? OR add this stupid idea to the DARWIN awards

You forgot to mention the obvious though. She outright LIED to her husband about the purpose of the lunch. Had he not been tipped off about it, who knows what would have happened. They WERE introduced to each other and, I say again, she LIED. Her "punishment" was not even close to what she deserved! And Shelly gets off scot free??? Your story but my critique; had to deduct 1 star from the usual 5.

Good story. Iamweasel doesn't even know how to spell his own name.

When he writes "my wife" he means his TS boyfriend, lol.

Stfu, loser. You're only good for a laugh.

I read it again and I continue to enjoy it. Wives sometimes seem too willing to engage in games where they know the truth, but play anyway. Husbands tend to take it on the chin from time to time as a result. I can't imagine a better way of teaching a lesson than this. It was delightful.

my wife offered me a hall pass, said I could bang Melania, after i finished puking she correctly assumed I'd rather cut my dick off than touch that malignant growth with a dumb outhouse owning Trumpanzees tiny dick, which never gets used anyway as they generally are sexless cucks.

Any system needs to be audited under realistic conditions in order to find system degradation, residual risk or latent conditions that could cause a system failure. Marriage is like every other system. Great story, and a swell idea!

Whew, glad you closed the loop vis a vis the lawnmower.

Who is jamie dornan?

Good story, but Megan and Harry for a hall pass? I’d almost rather do Kamala Harris and Porkchop Abraham than those two.

This is gold, waiting for someone to cheat and then do something about it is about as useless as believing any politician's lies. You want to head that off at the pass as soon as possible. Well done.

5/5

The "if she's going to cheat..." comment saying "Shoulda let her burn herself to the ground and then divorced her cheating ass" doesn't take into account the young children. The MC is better off doing it this way. Hopefully the lesson was learned. As usual, good job, M&M.

Clever and funny. 5

If she's going to cheat, she's going to cheat. Unless he had more money than Bezos and could have her watched 24/7/365 she finds a way to fulfill her fantasy. Shoulda let her burn herself to the ground and then divorced her cheating ass.

Relish the haters. Their negative energy just stimulates blood flow to the brain

Loved this and enjoy your style. Just reached the end of your LW stories. On my way to read the rest of your stories, Looking forward to it!

5 for you on this story.

A proactive response is sooooo much better than reactive.

Nip it in the bud, before it blossoms into a tragedy.

Enjoy stories were husbands discover a potential problem in their marriage and are proactive to correct it.

Loved the story although I also believe Corey was let off to easily. I hope you continue to write you do it verywell. People need to relax and just enjoy the story, not analyze it.

Who is "Laurel?"

Pranks that are a _little_ cruel add a poignancy to the result that ensures that the "lesson" was learned.

Afraid ,I wouldn't have let her off that lightly,there as to be more punishment.

Nope, the whore set out with the intention to cheat

Fuck her and her betrayal

And I must say you are absolutely one of my favorite authors. This example includes all of my favorite story attributes: Short - 2 page or less ; Strong male M.C. ; deception to the reader ; and a twist ending. Superb!

My only compliant - Now that I've read all of M&M's works, I have to be patient until another story is offered. I don't like being patient.

Good 'Gotcha'

Just for the epilogue.

And I do like a happy ending. So, in this case, she really was never going to cheat? She just wanted to satisfy her fascination that the guy looked like her dream? I can buy that.

FD45 is correct. Shelly is bad news. Brian should meet with her and Tom to demand an explanation of and apology for the meet my coworker lunch. Tom should realize Shelly doesn't respect her marriage to him any more than she respects the engagement of Corey and Brian. Brian should call off the wedding unless Corey agrees to limit contact with Shelly.

But it could of used at least a tiny explanation of who Laurel is. It's a celebrity game and yet every indication is that she is someone local. A tad confusing. She's just name dropped like she's someone the readers should know about but we do not.

Needs more fleshing out. Did she cheat with the Hall Pass guy?

Elaborate ruse and not sure why he went to the bother. Still, some people have odd fantasies.

Nice.

A bit different and nothing wrong with that.

There's nothing wrong with infatuation.

But when dishonesty adds to it,

you get problems.

This flash story deals well with that.

In a comic and "lesson learnt" way.

Well done moreandmore.

Top ratings from me.

Shelly may be her friend, but she isn’t his friend.

I liked it, very much. Great story. Thanks for posting.

Hilarious! 5* for humor alone.

That epilogue truly put this one over the top.

A well deserved 5🌟.

Bravo, a very profound story told in a funny way. Nice to be able to read one of the better stories. Thank you!

Tremendous!

Great read, give it a 5.

Who the hell is Laurel? Maybe I am out of touch too. Can’t find a celebrity by that name.

Seriously wanting to know...for a friend.

Original and funny

5* for a very witty short story. The husband is a real man who ended a potential hall pass problem before it could get started. Write On!

Great short story. Also, a very good idea to derail possible cheating. This "Hall Pass" idea is garbage - either you're committed to a marriage or your not. I'm glad the message was understood in this story.

LMFHO

Great read. Really enjoyed this short story. Wish there were more like this. If the critics want more character development, they should scan to the end to find those 10 to 15 page stories that may have more development. It's interesting that most of the critics are either anons or members that have never submitted any stories!

They should remember that these are works of fiction, and that reality is in the mind of the author. Instead of complaining, I just skip authors that fall short.

Don't let the bastards get you down!!!

Why this shorty isn't 5's all over.

That was fabulous!

And thank you for clearing up the mystery of the lawn mower slush fund!

Keep 'em coming!

and well executed. But, stop being so sensitive about criticism.

This is an easy 5

Seriously good stunt!

Had a real chuckle reading it. As one of the commentators said, don't let the dummies get to you. This site is not a college English Class..

...i must be out of the loop too. I don't know any of those celebrities either. But if I were going to play, I would say country music singer, sara evans. Lol. 5 stars. Thanx!

Loklie

Loved it!!!

A nice little tale that made me chuckle.

Not sure what the Anon commenter below with the 4 points was all steamed up about.

You’d think the tool had PAID for the story or something 😎

5 for the epilogue!

Fun shorty

Love the tongue in cheek humor.

Clearly a contender for Best Story at AFD 2021. Should have held it back but thanks for the laugh.

Is there a PayPal Money Pool for the lawnmower? Would send a buck or two

Got me laughing, thx

Although you did find a creative way to pay a compliment

That Epilogue closed all the dangling bits...Thanks. Made me smile today. Thanks for that too.

He did not misbehave. But she was on her way to doing so. His deception was ONLY in response to her behavior. Had she told him about the lookalike, she would be credibly innocent. Why did she hide it?