All Comments on 'Zoey's Punishment'

by MsMarie

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visioneervisioneerover 6 years ago

Welcome to Lit. You posted a good first story that would be improved by more attention to punctuation. Specifically, you need to offset prepositional phrases with commas. Some backstory to put Marie and Zoey into context would help the reader engage more with the story. That said, I encourage you to keep writing.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

This was boring. Nothing was described which was unusual, or erotic

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago

Love it,want more

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I've been reading for years and am finally ready to begin writing myself! I appreciate all feedback on my stories, so let me know what you think! Good, bad, and ugly are fine. However, please try to keep any criticism constructive. I look forward to hearing from you!